Talk:Minnesota Timberwolves failed relocation to New Orleans/GA1

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Reviewer: -- BigDom 17:54, 3 February 2010 (UTC)Reply

Overall, this is a pretty well written article, just have some improvements (mostly minor changes concerning the tense) ...

Lead
  • I would change "the National Basketball Association's (NBA's)" to "the National Basketball Association (NBA) franchise"
  • "Top Rank group would secure" ---> "Top Rank group secured"
  • "purchase the Wolves" – you've used Timberwolves before this and everywhere else in the article, so I'd change this to "purchase the Timberwolves"
  • "Taylor would purchase and keep the team" ---> "Taylor purchased the franchise and kept the team"
Relocation speculation
  • The first time the Target Center is mentioned, it would help to explain that this is the team's home arena
  • "Timberwolves ownership" ---> "The Timberwolves ownership"
  • "New Orleans would emerge" ---> "New Orleans emerged"
  • "New Orleans would later reemerge" ---> "New Orleans later reemerged"
Move to New Orleans
  • Since the team never moved to New Orleans, maybe this section would be better named "Proposed move to New Orleans"
  • "Top Rank was successful purchasing" ---> "Top Rank successfully purchased"
  • The rest of the section is written OK, but I think the last two paragraphs should be merged together.
Remaining in Minneapolis
  • "Glen Taylor would head a group" ---> "Glen Taylor later headed a group"
  • "the Timberwolves would make their first trip" ---> "the Timberwolves made their first trip"
Other general comments
  • The picture needs alt text
  • Throughout the article, sometimes the dates include a year (e.g. "February 11, 1994" and "June 15, 1995") but others don't. I realise that the dates are mostly from the same year, but it would be better to be consistent and add the missing years.

A pretty solid article, I'd be happy to pass this once the comments have been addressed. Feel free to leave a comment on my talk page if you have any queries. Cheers, -- BigDom 19:04, 3 February 2010 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review! I have addressed all of your comments. Please let me know if anything else needs to be added, deleted or amended. Cheers! Patriarca12 (talk) 01:15, 4 February 2010 (UTC)Reply

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:  
    B. MoS compliance:  
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:  
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:  
    C. No original research:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:  
    Seems to cover all the major aspects of a fairly small topic.
    B. Focused:  
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:  
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:  
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  


All comments have been addressed and the article now meets the GA criteria, so I will happily pass this one. Please consider reviewing an article of your choosing. -- BigDom 05:39, 4 February 2010 (UTC)Reply