Talk:Military Staff Committee/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Peacemaker67 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 02:29, 14 April 2020 (UTC)Reply


This article is in good shape. A few comments:

  • in the lead, when listing the P5, suggest Soviet Union (now Russia) and link Soviet Union at first mention above and at first mention in the body
  • Done
  • US Joint Chiefs of Staff, and be consistent with U.S. and US throughout
  • Done (I think I got them all)
  • United States Department of State is duplinked
  • unlinked second mention
  • "favored an international organization" is a bit obvious, do you mean a "multi-national organization" this appears at the end of the para also
  • Sure, changed both mentions
  • nations→nation's
  • yup, got it
  • United Nations Ccontrol
  • changed
  • suggest "US/UK Combined Chiefs of Staff command structure used in World War II"
  • good idea
  • "The Military Staff Commission was established" as you've defined MSC as Military Staff Committee in the lead, unless the name was changed at some stage, if so include details of when it changed
  • That was my oversight, it should have been committee.
  • "membership of the Committee" same comment as immediately above
  • Think I got it
  • "the Military Staff Committee was established" was it established as the Military Staff Commission or Military Staff Committee?
  • It was a committee. I think what tripped me up was that it was originally proposed as the Security and Armaments Commission but created as the Military Staff Committee
  • "advise and assist the United Nations Security Council (UNSC)" and link (drop later link)
  • Done
  • "By mid-October" of what year?
  • 1945, added
  • "Conflict over the organization's size" there is another example of organizations which needs an apostrophe
  • added both
  • it would be good to include the ranks of the military officers mentioned
  • added
  • organised→organized for consistency
  • added
  • "At the first meeting in January" in what year?
  • Actually was February 1946
  • "participate i nthe MSC"
  • Done
  • Security Council→UNSC
Done
  • not sure what is meant by "However, more than half of the reports 41 articles saw unanimous agreement." missing words?
  • rephrased as However, the MSC unanimously agreed to more than half of the 41 articles in the report, does that work?
  • great powers→UNSC P5?
  • linked Great power, though it's essentially interchangable, so I'd be willing to change it you want to
  • "British Foreign and Commonwealth Office"
  • Done
  • Howard Johnson, Dean Rusk and Henry Abbott? link all and who were they?
  • Rusk is the only one really notable, the others were minor figures, don't really merit mention
  • "The MSC was not considered to command troops in the Korean War" if that is correct
  • Done
  • "though UN troops were involved" suggest "though it was fought by troops under the United Nations Command headquarters" and link UNC
  • Done
  • "Proposals for reviving the Military Staff CommitteeMSC"
  • Yeah, got it
  • who is Grove? academic? author?
  • The article says he's Eric Grove, a naval historian?
  • " In 1994, the author Kai Bird"
  • done
  • the licensing of File:Combined Chiefs of Staff in Quebec.jpg needs work. Who took it, when was it first published etc?
  • Cannot find that, replaced with a nice PD image of Cordell Hull
  • the text box quote needs a citation
  • cited

That's me done, nice work thus far. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:56, 14 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Peacemaker67, Thanks for taking this on! I'll try and get to these comments later today Eddie891 Talk Work 13:23, 14 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Peacemaker67: I think I have addressed them all, a couple of minor questions. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:55, 14 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:54, 15 April 2020 (UTC)Reply