Talk:Michael J. Daly/GA1
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Ed! in topic GA Review
GA Review edit
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- It is reasonably well written:
- Not Yet
- The Lead should be expanded to summarize the entire article.
- Some of the things mentioned in the prose need links. 10th Mountain Division, Fort Drum, taps, etc. I recommend going through the article and linking to anything that an average person doesn't instantly understand.
- "the 10th Mountain Division (Light Infantry) of Fort Drum and The United States Military Academy of West Point performed the ceremony." -this should be moved up in the section.
- Longdashes (—) do not have spaces in between them. The form for them is "word—word" this is not consistent in the article. Also, dashes (-) used in the prose should be replaced with longdashes.
- I recommend a section/table for the awards he won, and some details as to how he was awarded the Silver Stars.
- I added the table and the display of ribbons but I haev yet to locate the info about the awarding of the silver or bronze stars. Also, although it is not specifically referenced in any reference I can find I added a note stating that he probably also received the World War II Victory Medal. --Kumioko (talk) 21:13, 7 July 2009 (UTC)
- It is factually accurate and verifiable:
- Not Yet
- "In May, 2006 Fairfield University awarded Michael Daly an honorary degree..." -This quote needs to be put into block form, and needs a reference.
- Removed, I couldn't find a reference for this one so I removed it. I did however find a couple of other honors with references that I added in. --Kumioko (talk) 16:34, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
- The quote in the next graph, "You walk that hallowed ground alone with your memories..." also needs a reference.
- "'Father, we need peacemakers. Anyone can shoot a gun.'" -needs a reference.
- I removed this one, I remember seeing it somewhere but I can't find it in any of the references. If I can find it again I will add it back with the appropriate reference. --Kumioko (talk) 15:47, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
- He then saluted Rev. Scott from his death bed. -needs a reference.
- Also removed this one, again I remember seeing it somewhere but I can't find it in any of the references. If I can find it again I will add it back with the appropriate reference. --Kumioko (talk) 15:47, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
- Every reference needs to be put into a {{cite book}} or {{cite web}} template.
- Is this just a general statement or is there one specifically that you see. I do not see any that are not in a cite. --Kumioko (talk) 15:35, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
- It is broad in its coverage:
- It follows the neutral point of view policy:
- Not Yet
- "His wife's birthday is April 18, the date (though not the year) he battled so valiantly in Nuremberg." - This is both POV and uncited.
- Done, I removed several bits of text that where either POC or just not needed. --Kumioko (talk) 19:41, 7 July 2009 (UTC)
- It is stable:
- Pass No problems there.
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate:
- Not Yet
- It is customary to include an image of the Medal of Honor next to or underneath the photograph of the person in Medal of Honor articles.