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Nominator: Phlsph7 (talk · contribs) 17:20, 11 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 07:56, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
@Phlsph7: taking this review. 750h+ 07:56, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
lead
editIt is often characterized as first philosophy, implying
should it be "first philosophy" or "the first philosophy"? Correct me if i'm wrong.It investigates existence and/or being, the features
don't change this but I just wish there was a word for "and/or". I can't think of any so just leave it as it is- I agree, "and/or" is odd. I tried to adjust the sentence to be first about existence since it later talks about the categories of being. But we could also leave it as it is. Phlsph7 (talk) 12:13, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
- I don't particularly mind with this one. I think either is fine. 750h+ 12:16, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
definition
edit..providing an account of what metaphysicians actually do while others..
remove "actually"..Some philosophers follow Aristotle in describing metaphysics as "first philosophy",..
like what i said before, do you think it should be "the first philosophy" or simply "first philosophy"In regard to the analysis of conceptual schemes, philosopher P. F. Strawson..
change "In regard to" to "Regarding" or "Concerning" for conciseness.The nature of metaphysics can also be characterized in relation to its main branches.
do we have a more concise alternative for "in relation to"?- "In the last paragraph of the Branches subsection, "Meta-metaphysics" shouldn't be bolded
- I think this is because Meta-metaphysics redirects there, see MOS:BOLD. I added an anchor so it redirects directly to that paragraph. Phlsph7 (talk) 12:27, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
- I still think it shouldn't be bolded. I think you should leave it unbolded, and when/if you decide to create an article you link it. But I don't think it matters much so you can leave it as is if you want. 750h+ 12:38, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
topics
editAccording to Alexius Meinong, there are some objects that do not exist
==> According to Alexius Meinong, some objects do not existobjects persist through time and undergo changes in
==> objects persist through time and change inAs they undergo changes, they
==> As they change, theyFree will plays a key role in ethics in regard to the moral responsibility people have for what they do.
I think "concerning" or "regarding" sounds better than "in regard to".
methodology
editcomponent parts in order to clarify their
change "in order to" to simply "to".
criticism
editA slightly weaker position allows that metaphysical statements have meaning
==> "A slightly weaker position allows metaphysical statements to have meaning"
relation to other disciplines
edit- this section is a pass, no problems here. nice work!
history
edit- may be my own personal opinion, but with
Meanwhile in Indian Buddhism, the Madhyamaka school
you might consider adding a comma after "Meanwhile"? universals by stating that universals can exist both in matter and in the mind.
remove the second "in".
overall the prose is excellent, amazing article. source and image review are coming. 750h+ 11:24, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
image review
editThere are seven images in the article currently. They are all appropriately licensed and have WP:ALT text, so this shall be an image review pass. 750h+ 12:22, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
source review and spot check
editI'll spot check six sources. Reviewing this version
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Source quality, like always, looks great, so I'll be passing this. Excellent work User:Phlsph7.
verdict and other comments
editExcellent work Phlsph7. Address the remaining comments I have and I'll be happy to promote this article to Good Article status. Well done. 750h+ 12:42, 22 May 2024 (UTC)