Talk:Mary Dilys Glynne/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:40, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

As promised, I'll take this JAGUAR  20:40, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• "Her research led to increased yields in agriculture, which was of particular note during World War II" - link World War II
• "As soon as Glynne graduated she was offered a post in the University's department of agriculture" - no need for capital here. And which university is it? University College of North Wales?
• "The work was sufficiently notable that the University of Wales awarded an Glynne an MSc" - duplicate 'an'
• "Mary Glynne was the British winner of the Dr. Georgina Sweet fellowship" - no need to start the paragraph with her first name, I'd use just "Glynne" to stay consistent
• "The award included a year's study in Australia, Tazmania and New Zealand" - Tasmania
• "On this basis, she was able to advise which strains of cereal should be planted in the affected fields Glynne also discovered" - missing full stop
• Although it's not required, I noticed that the infobox image doesn't have a caption. Do you know when the image was taken? I know that the rationale doesn't give out any of that information, so feel free to ignore
• No dead links
• No dab links

Those were all the minor issues I could find, but overall it's a well written and interesting article. Sorry for the delay! On hold. JAGUAR  11:53, 8 April 2016 (UTC)

I have fixed all the issues identified and we have looked again for the image - unfortunately we have no more information about the photo other than it is of her (we don't want to make any presumptuous comments!) Thanks again for the speedy and thorough review Jaguar ツStacey (talk) 20:18, 8 April 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for addressing them! Don't worry about the photo, nothing like that would ever be a GA requirement. Promoted JAGUAR  22:05, 8 April 2016 (UTC)