Talk:Martin Stephens (drug smuggler)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 10:39, 6 December 2011 (UTC)

I will be conducting the review shortly. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:39, 6 December 2011 (UTC)

• Citation needed tags must be fulfilled;
• I have added some more where they are necessary;
• Refs 15 and 17 have dead links and should be updated or replaced.
• If "Criticism of Australian Federal Police tipoff" is indeed relevant to Martin Stephens - who is not mentioned - this needs to be made clearer or the section removed if not;
• The English should be tightened - the use of so many quotations gives the article a journalistic rather than encyclopedic tone - for example the part about "dobbing them in".
• The lead should be longer - it needs to provide an adequate summary per WP:LEAD)
• The article ought to say more about the man personally - but this sort of thoroughness is not required under the GACR
• I'm also worried about some bias against the Indonesian authorities. Much is made of his appeals, and that of the Australian government. There is little from Indonesia in this regard. A few tweaks, such as a corresponding quotation or the Indonesian side of the story from a native newspaper would be sufficient.
• I also raise the same image problems Jezhotwells did at Talk:Andrew Chan/GA1. Under a life imprisonment, he won't be dead any time soon.

Placing on hold for 7 days so these problems can be fixed.

Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:47, 6 December 2011 (UTC)

Failing per 7 day wait and comments made at the nominator's talk page which amount to a withdrawal. Once the issues have been fixed, feel free to nominate the article again - there is no minimum period for good faith nominations. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 14:35, 13 December 2011 (UTC)