Talk:Marshmello/GA1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by 100cellsman in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: 100cellsman (talk · contribs) 08:21, 26 December 2018 (UTC)
I'll review this article soon.100cellsman (talk) 08:21, 26 December 2018 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- I couldn’t grasp the information of Forbes revealing his identity easily. The section could be worded better.
- What does the section “which had been previewed by the duo for a long period” mean?
- “Marshmello's and Dotcom's associating with Shalizi, and the uncovering of their similar tattoos and birthday.” I found this wording awkward.
- "Having done that,” unnecessary statement.
- ”During the mid-year” A more precise date would be useful.
- ”on which he” in > on
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- The article uses present tense words inappropriately at times.
- ”in which Mexican rapper Omar LinX is featured”
- ”singer-songwriter Wrabel is featured”
- ”His next single, announced on Twitter, is a collaboration”
- Pitchfork’s review for Joytime II as mentioned in the lead, isn’t in the article body.
- The appearance and musical style sections should be joined together as an artistry section.
- ”Marshmello released his last two singles of 2018” is a dated statement.
- Alone being released under the label Monstercat isn’t in the article body apart from the lead.
- The article uses present tense words inappropriately at times.
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
- ”having reached the top 10 in more than 20 countries.” is not in reference 24.
- ”released through Joytime Collective,” is not in reference 25.
- ”in which American singer-songwriter Wrabel is featured.” is not in reference 35.
- Not certain if YourEDM is a reliable source, and reference 16 citing the Ookay, Noah Cyrus and “Chasing Colors” section can be dropped as Billboard is much more reputable.
- C. It contains no original research:
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- The infobox says that he has his own YouTube Channel for gaming and cooking besides music, and I can’t find that being mentioned in the article body aside from from his video views.
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- “He is managed by Moe Shalizi of Red Light Management, who also manages artists such as Jauz, Ookay and Slushii” I don’t see the need for the other artists under his management.
- Selena Gomez and Demi Lovato are very well known so its not really necessary to refer to them as a “singer and actress” and a “pop singer” respectively. And Bastille can just be referred to as a “british band” instead of a “British indie pop band“
- “He covers his identity similarly to other electronic music artists such as Deadmau5 and Daft Punk” There doesn’t need to be a comparison in the lead.
- “which features Marshmello's pet mouse, Joel (Deadmau5's first name)” Totally unnecessary.
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Questionable POV writing:
- ”with the late rapper, Lil Peep,”
- ”from established and well-known DJs like Skrillex”
- ”an organization which aims to help refugees and immigrant children”
- ”with fellow producer Jauz”
- The lead mentioning the many artists he collaborated may come off as promotional. Also “his second most-successful career single” is maybe POV?
- Questionable POV writing:
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- The images in the article body are kinda cluttered in the article in my opinion.
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Unfortunately, this article constitutes as a quickfail. I found too many problems than I had anticipated. Hope these problems get resolved for this article to be nominated again.100cellsman (talk) 11:32, 26 December 2018 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail:
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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27 December update: Issues have been fixed without prior nomination, The article is now promoted.100cellsman (talk) 12:33, 27 December 2018 (UTC)