Talk:Malaysia–Vietnam relations/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: Challenger.rebecca (talk · contribs) 02:17, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

I assessed the article for quality. It still needs some work.

None of these parts have citations at the end.
"Formal relations between Malaya and South Vietnam were established in 1959 following a bilateral summit between Tunku Abdul Rahman and Ngo Dinh Diem a year earlier. An agreement between the countries to establish their respective embassies in Kuala Lumpur and Saigon respectively was reached in 1960, although the embassies were not established until 1964, by which time Malaya had been renamed Malaysia." Y — Rewrite, citation added.
"A sizeable number of Malaysian men have foreign wives. According to statistics provided by the Malaysian National Registry Department, one third of these are Vietnamese." Y — Rewrite, citation added. "Vietnam has a sizeable number of oil fields in the South China Sea." Y — Citation added.
"assistance to Johor to fend off a botched military conquest in the 1590s." Y — Citation added.

Also, provide more details about the "economic and national security problems to Malaysia", Y — More details added along with citation. and when you say "Subsequent kings after Po Rome", who was Po Rome the king of? Y

And here are some copy-edits.

en route to [the] Chinese Ming dynasty Y
The Vietnamese were defeated by Malacca(put this in active voice, not passive voice) Y
To the east in the Sultanate of Terengganu, ethnic Chinese from Cochinchina sailed there(this should be 'Ethnic Chinese from Cochinchina sailed to the east in the Sultanate of Terengganu') Y — Rewrite.
presiding [over] a ceremony to mark Y
who is[was] also of Vietnamese origin Y
[the] MCP's Secretary General Y
of the refugee camps,(use a period, not a comma) Y
as an[a] version of the Y
which[where] it has been located since 2004 Y
executive functions was[were] later Y
Precinct 15, Putrajaya(add comma after Putrajaya) Y
crime[s] involving the Y
"Malaysian clients have attributed their alluring physique and good hospitality practices to their popularity"(the other way around, they attributed their popularity to those other things) Y — Rewrite.
in economic as well as(economic what?)  Fixed

Hi Challenger.rebecca, thanks for your time to take a review on this article. I would look up on the issues as soon as possible, just give me some time. Cheers! :) ~ Muffin Wizard ^;) 10:13, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Hello again, I have done fixing the part you've been asking for. ~ Muffin Wizard ^;) 01:26, 18 October 2015 (UTC)

Malacca defeat[defeated] Y
between Communist cadres from(no capitalization) Y
having sufficiently addressing[addressed] Y
Information Technology(no capitalization) Y
already established when South Vietnam recognising Federation of Malaya independence on 1957(change to 'established when South Vietnam recognized the Federation of Malaya's independence on 1957') Y
has[was] providing aid Y
later been replied(change to 'was reciprocated twice') Y
Malaya have transformed[transformed] Y
an additional territories[territory] Y
on[of] the American involvement Y
it withdrawal[withdrew] the embassy Y
partnership in economic[economic matters] Y
and the other way around, they attributed their popularity to those other things(change this to 'Malaysian clients have attributed their popularity to their alluring physique and good hospitality practices') Y
"when the Vietnamese government imposed a policy of confiscating private property from the South Vietnamese in that year." - Where does the citation say this?  Fixed
-The sentence starting with "By the time of 1963 when Malaya have transformed" is too long and should be split up. Y Challenger.rebecca (talk) 16:50, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Ohh my goodness, I'm already forgot you had replied to my answer, sorry for the late. I'm going to working it now >< ~ Muffin Wizard ^;) 13:33, 20 November 2015 (UTC)

 Done @Challenger.rebecca: hope you would tag my name in the future so I would be always know when you have replied. ~ Muffin Wizard ^;) 13:45, 20 November 2015 (UTC)

@Muffin Wizard: Okay, I'll pass this. - Challenger.rebecca (talk) 17:49, 21 November 2015 (UTC)

Thank you! :) ~ Muffin Wizard ^;) 04:15, 22 November 2015 (UTC)