Talk:M. J. Thirumalachar/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 09:49, 3 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

First reading

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  • "M. J. Thirumalachar was born ..." - Could you clarify, or split this sentence. It is currently unclear to which of his parents the second half refers.  Done
  • "He served out his regular career at HAL, superannuating as the superintendent of research in 1975." - This is a bit technical, and if you are going to use the acronym HAL, I think you should introduce it in the previous sentence.   Done
  • What on earth was he doing in the Department of Pediatrics at the University of Minnesota Medical School? Doesn't sound likely at all and I can't see the pediatrics bit in the cited sources.   Done added citations, expanded sentence --jojo@nthony (talk) 06:40, 4 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Wikilink: peptaibol, Emericellopsis (needs italics too), chemotherapeutants   Done --jojo@nthony (talk) 06:44, 4 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • There are a number of places in the article where I would include the definite article "the" in places where Indian English does not seem to think it necessary. NOTED --jojo@nthony (talk) 06:47, 4 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Looking back at the lead, now that I have read the whole article, I see a number of citations in this section. It should not be necessary to have any citations in the lead, because it is supposed to be a summary of the main body of text, where all important facts should be cited. In this instance there is information in the lead on antifungal antibiotics that is not present elsewhere in the article.   Done citations moved to the body of the article. --jojo@nthony (talk) 07:25, 4 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:45, 3 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • @Cwmhiraeth: changes made as per assessment. --jojo@nthony (talk) 07:25, 4 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

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