Talk:Luther Monument (Washington, D.C.)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: APK (talk · contribs) 03:36, 22 July 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 08:08, 31 July 2024 (UTC)

I'll start this review. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 08:08, 31 July 2024 (UTC)

Thank you for the review and your patience. I'll work on this asap. APK hi :-) (talk) 03:42, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

General Comments

I'll be adding comments as I go.

Prose and content

• Question: He told a reporter from the Lutheran Observer this is the first mention?
  •  Remark: I reworded it. Let me know what you think. APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
• make the idea reality weasley
  •  Done APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
• Suggestion: The idea soon spread amongst Lutheran pastors throughout the area. An association was formed to make the idea reality. On Valentine's Day, 1883, an image of the proposed statue was printed in Lutheran newspapers. Soon, the Luther Place Memorial Church, then named the Memorial Evangelical Lutheran Church of Washington, D.C., suggested the statue be placed in front of its church. Donations soon arrived rw to avoid repeating soon
  •  Done APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
• Dedication section, particularly first and second paragraphs seem excessive detail to go into; don't need a play-by-play of an event pre-dedication. is this covered in such detail by secondary sources? If not it's probably undue. 85% is sourced to one primary source.
  •  Remark: I've always included details on statue dedications in DC if a source is available. Which sentences do you think should be cut? APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

We're just trying to avoid giving undue weight to details in a specific part. So it's not about cutting sentences, it's about summarizing. As I note, the fact secondary sources aren't covering this stuff in their summary, and wouldn't in this detail, is telling. That being said, some easy stuff to cut includes " The choir sang two more songs, The Hymn of Praise and Keep Us, Lord, Faithful to Your Word (Erhalt uns, Herr, bei deinem Wort)" and "People who had gathered at the German Hall on 11th Street NW marched to the ceremony site" -> "People marched from the German Hall to the ceremony site", if you really want to keep those details.

 Done APK hi :-) (talk) 10:03, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

I think the section can still be summarized a lot more. At an absolute most, it should be two paragraphs long. If you disagree then please tell me, because I may be wrong about this. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 11:58, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

My reasoning behind the current version of the dedication section is it shows the importance of the statue during that time. It's something I include in all of the DC statues/monuments since it was often a front-page story. I can cut some more if you feel it necessary. APK hi :-) (talk) 03:13, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

You've been around the block longer than me. What do you think of my concern (just re; too much detail) that such extensive text is drawn from a primary source, and the details are not repeated in secondary sources?

I do think it can be trimmed further, for example: "by the choir after another address by a pastor": It doesn't to me speak to the monument's importance to the community that a song at one of the meetings before the unveiling was sung by the choir, or that the song occurred after one of multiple addresses by the pastor.

I know it's going to be easy to acquiesce and just trim, but it's a beautiful section, and if there's an issue with my thinking I want to hear it. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 04:43, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

I trimmed a bit more. What do you think? APK hi :-) (talk) 09:44, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

Okay Y Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 10:50, 6 August 2024 (UTC)

• "Nevertheless, the event ended with a prayer" not really even a suggestion but I find the use of nevertheless here funny. They prayed even though people got hurt?
  •  Done APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
• E. RIETSCHEL FACIT. GEGOSSEN LAUCHHAMMER 1884 translate, or leave out the exact wording, just note there's a German transcription. en-wiki.
  •  Remark: I'm sorry, can you give me an idea what you mean by noting a German transcription? (the layout I mean) APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

Instead of Inscriptions on the monument include:[16]

(rear side of statue, near the pedestal)

E. RIETSCHEL FACIT. GEGOSSEN LAUCHHAMMER 1884

Structure in prose, i.e. On the front of the monument, the words "Martin Luther" are written, and the reverse features an inscription in German.

 Done Thank you. APK hi :-) (talk) 10:03, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

• An association was formed is this the committee referred to later?
  •  Done APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
• the North German Lloyd Steamship Company too much detail
  •  Done APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)
• Add when Martin Luther's birthday is when saying they tried to make it for the 400th anniversary.
  •  Done APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

Sources

• The article and source list are short enough I'm going to make my way through a bit more systematically than a spot check.

1 - 2) Y

3 - 5) Can't access

6) Y

7) "Spilling all of the dignitaries into the crowd of 5,000 spectators below." Why do we think there were hundreds of dignitaries on the stage?

 Done Reworded for clarity, I hope. APK hi :-) (talk) 09:21, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

8) Y

9) Y

10) Y

Other things

• Images: All tagged appropriately, appropriate captions (some redundancy in referring to "the statue" in most captions when it's visibly in the photo.) Y
• Referencing all good (no OR, COPYVIO. Earwig down, based off spotcheck) Y

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:05, 31 July 2024 (UTC)

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