Talk:Love in Motion (Anika Moa album)/GA3

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GA Review

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Reviewer: --CallMeNathanTalk2Me 23:16, 29 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • The album's underlying theme is one of love, and in writing the album, Moa drew the most inspiration from her civil partner, Azaria Universe. -> could read better.
  • Better?
  • I know your from New Zealand, but the dates are backwards.
  • MOS:DATE - either style is acceptable. Since this is about a NZ-origin album, I have used NZ English
  • Love in Motion saw Moa -> can albums see?
  • Lol, done
  • Critical reviews for the album have been mostly positive, and it debuted and peaked on the New Zealand Albums Chart at number four -> doesn't flow. Consider splitting
  • Done
  • The lead single from Love in Motion was "Running Through the Fire (Storm)", -> "RTFS" served as the album's lead single, which peaked
  • Done

Background

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  • shouldn't it be Background and inspiration? You speak about the song's lyrical inspiration, not so much the recording process
  • Inspiration is part of an album's background
  • the album.[2][3] The album -> try to mix it up a bit
  • Done
  • "In the Air" is about Moa's fear of flying. -> sentencing is a bit awkward. Could be fixed up a bit. Many sentences don't flow and are so short, it reads choppy
  • Hmm, take a look now?
  • and the album was recorded in two more weeks -> with the entire recording process being completed in one month; or something like that
  • That would kind of blur what the source is saying.
  • and the album was produced by Moa and Andre Upston -> doesn't flow with the beginning of the sentence
  • Done

Music and lyrics

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  • should be music and composition, as this section doesn't speak much of the lyrics, as the previous section does
Renamed as 'Composition'
  • Love in Motion saw -> doesn't make sense
  • Done
  • pop rock environment -> environment
  • Eh?
  • The sound of -> the sound? or the song?
  • Rewrote sentence
  • ". -> you have allot these issues
  • I don't understand. Do you mean I have too many quotes?
  • Katarina Filipe praised Moa's live performing nature, noting that "the radio and CD versions were nothing compared to her on-stage performance" -> is this a good thing?
  • Yes, the recorded versions were nothing (ie bad) compared to her live performances (ie really good)

Singles

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  • It has not appeared on any singles chart, however. -> it didn't; also try combining it with another sentence.

Charts

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  • You should create a peaking chart as well as certifications wherever applicable.
  • Why? It has only appeared on one chart.

References

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  • Would be better is dates were year-month-day format, like this 2010-11-30.
  • Date stylings are optional, and I have noticed that ISO dates are becoming less common on WP