Talk:Los Angeles Lakers/GA1

GA Review

Immediately looking at the article, I don't think this is near enough to a pass to put it on hold and give it my level of full review, but I will do my best to try and help you improve it and push it towards a future re-nomination.

I would also suggest you look at Portland Trail Blazers, which is a basketball team GA, and any basketball team FAs, for a guide on improvements. A WP:PR might also be a good idea.

The main problem with it is the lack of text really for such a huge subject. The history section could be vastly expanded, but particularly it looks very weighted towards recent years. Each decade from the 50s to 90s, get only a paragraph each, yet the recent years, have different split off periods, with the last season getting a long paragraph all to itself.

Is the celebrity fans section really notable enough to be included? It's also very stubby.

I would suggest putting the home arenas section into prose rather than a basic list.

For such a team as famous as the Lakers, I would expect far, far more information and more sources available to you. There is only one book used in the reference section.

There are also several MOS issues.

• Scores should use endashes. See Wp:DASH. As should date ranges.
• Numbers under 10 should be written in full. See WP:MOSNUM.
• Numerals and units should be broken by a non-breaking space, e.g. 20 years.
• See WP:DATE for how to use dates. Also they should be consistent throughout.
• Don't use images directly under level 3 heading. Also don't force image sizes. Portrait pics should also use the "upright" tag in them. See WP:IMAGE for more details.

Best of luck expanding and improving this article towards a renomination. If you want any more advice or questions, just fire a message at me. Peanut4 (talk) 18:32, 10 August 2008 (UTC)