Talk:Live in Atlantic City (Beyoncé video)/GA1

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Reviewer: Prism (talk · contribs) 16:39, 16 July 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• DVD should be removed. It was also released as a Blu-Ray, and in digital form, right?
• "Released on November 22, 2013 by Columbia Records as part of a two-disc set of the home media release of the film Life Is But a Dream (2013)," → It was released on November 22, 2013 by Columbia Records as part of the home media release of her autobiographical television film Life Is But a Dream (2013).
• "the album contains live footage from the singer's four-night residency show Revel Presents: Beyoncé Live in May, 2012 at Revel Atlantic City. Directed by Beyoncé and Ed Burke, Live in Atlantic City contains live performances of twenty one songs from the concert as well as a new song, "God Made You Beautiful" written by Sia Furler." → The concert film contains footage from Beyoncé's residency show in venue Revel Atlantic City, and was directed by Ed Burke and she. It encompasses live performances of twenty one songs, in addition to a new song of Beyoncé, "God Made You Beautiful".
• I would avoid referring to the concert film as an album. It may be confusing to readers
• "videos of three performances" Clarify that they belong to the concert. Also, is this necessary to the lead? Aren't there any reviews of the film?
• "It peaked at number one on the US Billboard Top Music Videos chart and the UK Music DVD Chart becoming the singer's fourth and first chart topper in the countries respectively" Clarify that you're referring to the set of 2 discs and not just Live in Atlantic City

Content

• "Live in Atalntic City" has a typo and could be replaced by "The film"
• The reference at the end of the 1st paragraph is unnecessary (per OVERCITE)
• ""Run the World (Girls)" is preceded by a video onstage as "Countdown" is played in the background." Confusing (is the song played in the background, randomly, or is it part of the video? Does the video start being played during the performance of "Countdown"?)
• "Live in Atalntic City" has a typo
• "chorus of voices" → choir
• Why is Beyoncé the only one credited in the ref?
• "She continues singing about "kissing [the] little feet and perfect smiles" of her child" filler text
• Specify how "God Made You Beautiful" was included on the release

Commercial performance

• "Live in Atlantic City charted together with the two-disc set release of Life Is But a Dream." Confusing. Makes it seem like the concert film charted together with a two-disc set of Life Is But a Dream (not specifying if the concert is a part of the latter) I reccomend adding a note stating that the sales represented in the section are of Life Is But a Dream because the concert film is part of it.

Everything else is fine. pedro | talk 16:39, 16 July 2014 (UTC)

Actually, there aren't any reviews of the concert film. And I think that the release of the three performances is important to the lead as there is a separate section about it in the Background section. Everything else  Done except "Specify how "God Made You Beautiful" was included on the release". Can you please further explain this? My love is love (talk) 17:20, 16 July 2014 (UTC)

Did the song feature on the DVD as a video? As a digital download? (etc) pedro | talk 17:54, 16 July 2014 (UTC)

I added that it was featured as an audio. My love is love (talk) 18:18, 16 July 2014 (UTC)

Good to go now! pedro | talk 20:18, 16 July 2014 (UTC)