Talk:Little Athletics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 21:05, 24 August 2014 (UTC)

I'll take this. give me a couple of days to review this.  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 21:05, 24 August 2014 (UTC)

@TheQ Editor:, just a friendly reminder about this GAN. It has been a couple of days. NickGibson3900 ^{Talk Sign my Guestbook Contributions} 07:55, 28 August 2014 (UTC)

@NickGibson3900: Sorry, my laptop's internet went down just as I clicked the submit button. I re wrote it. Cheers,  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 18:22, 28 August 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• It's too much like an ad. 3 paragraphs dedicated in explaining how great "Little Athletics" is? You should also consider including a brief history of it.  Done
• The body doesn't mention anything about "Little A's or Little Aths"  Removed

Little Athletics Events

• Change heading to "Events"  Done
• What do all those abbreviations stand for? (VIC) (NSW) (QLD) (SA) (WA) (TAS) (ACT)  Linked
• Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -   between a number and the unit of measurement.  Fixed

Structure and Governance

• Consider merging the two paragraphs together.  Merged

History

• There are a lot of short sub sections in section 3.2.1. Perhaps merging the short ones together would help.  Merged
• The sub section titles contain peacock phrases. It sounds more like an essay. You should just include the year.  Changed title
• Section 3.2.2 contains a lot of in line citations to the same ref. Consider only adding it at the end of the paragraph.  Done
• Same thing with section "3.2.3", "3.2.4", and "3.2.5"  Done
• "Geelong brach" - is this a typo?  Fixed
• "However Billingham still could not get support for Little Athletics from VAAA instead they suggested to drop the junior competition and focus on the rapidly expanding senior one." - no punctuation in between?  Rephrased
• "VAAA and they accepted both" - should be "VAAA and both were accepted"  Rephrased
• "200 boys and girls more than 200 boys and girls" - doesn't make sense  Fixed

Current

• "little athletes" - should just be athletes  Fixed

Other

• one dead link. See here  Fixed
• External Links go after the References  Moved

Reply

@TheQ Editor: Thanks for the review. I think I have fixed all the problems with this article. NickGibson3900 ^{Talk Sign my Guestbook Contributions} 07:31, 29 August 2014 (UTC)