Talk:Lisa the Vegetarian/GA1

GA Review

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Hello. I'll be doing the GA review for this article. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

• "and on the back of the script he scribbled "Lisa becomes a vegeterian?"." - Vegetarian is spelled wrong. Was this a typo or is it spelled the way he wrote it on the script?
• "Cohen thinks the advantage of writing episodes about Lisa is that when she cares about something, and you really believe in her" - I think it would be better not to address you --> "Cohen thinks the advantage of writing episodes about Lisa is that when she cares about something, and the audience can really believe in her" or something to that effect
• "Every time they do a story that involves thinking about the way the world is, it is often through her eyes, he said." - if this is a direct quotation it needs quotation marks
• What is the quote from "Octopus's Garden" that Linda says? It is mentioned twice in the article, so it left me wondering...not an essential thing to add, but I thought I'd mention it anyway.
• Make it clearer that "Maybe I'm Amazed" was from McCartney's solo career in the lead. Because it is grouped with Beatles' songs, an unfamiliar reader would probably assume it was a Beatles' song, too.

The article will remain on hold for seven days. Nikki♥311 01:23, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing. I think I have addressed all of your concerns. :) TheLeftorium 14:46, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

Okay. Everything looks great. Pass. Nikki♥311 20:21, 18 December 2008 (UTC)

Yay, thanks! :) TheLeftorium 20:30, 18 December 2008 (UTC)