Talk:Lights and Sounds (song)/GA1

GA Review

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GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• "The song's lyrics are based on the band's pressures on coping with the success that they were enduring when writing songs for their second album." — Remove "that" betweeen "success" and "they" and remove "pressures on", as it sounds redundant.
  • Done.
• "The song, itself, won the 2006 Spike Video Game Award..." — "itself" is unnecessary as it's obvious we're referring to the song
  • Done.
• "...it was a relief"." — Move the quotation mark after the period.
  • Not according to this.
    • I knew about that. AFAIK when a period should go inside the quote (end of a quoted sentence) and outside the quote (end of the main sentence), the one inside is written. However, I can't find a MOS rule about it, so I'm going to pass this. Admiral Norton ^(talk) 23:47, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
• "Longineu Parsons' plays a nonstop drumming rhythm..." — Why is there an apostrophe after Parsons' last name?
  • I'm pretty sure its supposed to be there, but I've removed it.
• "Afterward, the song spent 11 weeks on the chart, before retiring of April 19, 2006." — Remove "2006".
  • Done.
• Per WP:LQ, Greenwald's and Beaujour's quotes should have the period inside the quotation marks.
  • Done.
• "...but when it came time to start production for the music video, it was..." — Change to "...when the time came to start production, it was..."
  • Done.
• "Then it is followed with a slow motion sequence, as it shows the band continuing the song, still in a fast pace." — Change to "As the video shows the band continuing the song still at a fast pace, the effect is followed by a slow motion sequence."
  • Done.
• Per MOS:SLASH, use spaced slashes (" / ") instead of unspaced ones ("/") when quoting the lyrics. Also, do not separate lyrics in sentences by commas or colons, treat them as ordinary quotes.
  • Done.
• It would be useful to direct the Yellowcard Wiki link to the specific entry about the song. Admiral Norton ^(talk) 22:44, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
  • If there's anything else, please let me know. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:10, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
    • These were all of my concerns. Admiral Norton ^(talk) 23:47, 13 March 2009 (UTC)