Talk:Liaquat Ali Khan/GA1

GA Reassessment

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GA Sweeps: On hold

As part of the WikiProject Good Articles, we're doing Sweeps to determine if the article should remain a Good article. In reviewing the article, I have found there are multiple issues that needs to be addressed.

Needs citations:

1. Address the "citation needed" tags that have been there since February 2007 and December 2008.
2. "In his early life, Liaquat believed in Indian Nationalism. His views gradually changed."
3. The last paragraph in the "Pakistan movement" section is unsourced.
4. "Liaquat called it "the most important occasion in the life of this country, next in importance, only to the achievement of independence"."
5. The majority of the "Death" section is unsourced.
6. "He was further criticised for not visiting the Soviet Union, whereas he did go the United States. This was perceived as a rebuff to Moscow, and has been traced to profound adverse consequences, including Soviet help to India, most prominently in the 1971 war which ultimately led to the separation of Bangladesh."
7. In Pakistan, Liaquat Ali Khan is regarded as Jinnah's “right hand man” and heir apparent. His role in filling in the vacuum created by Jinnah’s death is seen as decisive in tackling critical problems during Pakistan’s fledgling years and in devising measures for the consolidation of Pakistan. His face is printed on postage stamps across the country.

Other issues:

1. The cleanup tag needs to be addressed. I don't know how a GA could have lasted this long with this tag, and I was almost tempted to immediately delist the article.
2. "He graduated in 1918 from Muhammedan Anglo-Oriental College..." This doesn't need to be italicized.
3. The "Political career" section is made up of multiple short paragraphs. Either expand on these or merge them together to improve the flow of the article.
4. "Liaquat moved a resolution incorporating the objectives of the Pakistan Resolution in the 'aims and objectives of the Muslim League'." If this is a quote, use quotation marks.
5. "Liaquat Ali Khan's only faith was..." His full name doesn't need to be used in the article. Refer to him by last name. Fix all of the other occurrences throughout the article. For the following section heading, it should also be reworded. The paragraph also needs to be re-written as there are errors throughout.
6. "Liaquat was shot twice in the chest during that meeting by a man sitting in the audience only fifteen yards away." Remove "only" and add a conversion for the measurement. Now that the sentence has been reworded, it reads as "Liaquat was shot twice in the chest reported that the police immediately killed the assassin who was later identified as Saad Akbar Babrak." This sentence needs to be re-written. Also the details of where he was shot from should be re-added.
7. "He ruled for five years but did not make a serious attempt to give constitution to the ill fated country." New sections should not begin with a pronoun, begin with his last name. This sentence also needs to be re-worded.
8. "Amin also notes that "Failure to visit a country in response to its invitations has hardly ever become the cause of long-term estrangement." This doesn't need to be italicized.
9. Many of the citations only include the title and access date. They should also include date, author, publisher, etc. The citation templates at WP:CITET can help with formatting.
10. Why is there a large block of text in the notes section? Not sure if it is supposed to be part of the article or if it vandalism?

I will leave the article on hold for seven days, but if progress is being made and an extension is needed, one may be given. If no progress is made, the article may be delisted, which can then later be renominated at WP:GAN. I'll contact all of the main contributors and related WikiProjects so the workload can be shared. Once the above issues are addressed, I'll help do a final copyedit of the article. If you have any questions, let me know on my talk page and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. --Happy editing! Nehrams2020 (talk • contrib) 04:54, 15 July 2009 (UTC)

Some of the issues were addressed this week. I will leave the article on hold for another week for the remaining issues to be addressed. Address the main citations issues and I can assist with copyediting the article afterwards. --Happy editing! Nehrams2020 (talk • contrib) 18:06, 21 July 2009 (UTC)

GA Sweeps: Delisted

The article has been on hold for another week and none of the major issues were addressed. As a result I have delisted the article as it still has a way to go before meeting the GA criteria. Continue to improve the article, addressing the issues above. Once they are addressed, please renominate the article at WP:GAN. I look forward to seeing the further improvement of the article, and don't hesitate to contact me if you need assistance with any of these. If you disagree with this review, a community consensus can be reached at WP:GAR. If you have any questions, let me know on my talk page and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. --Happy editing! Nehrams2020 (talk • contrib) 23:15, 28 July 2009 (UTC)