Talk:Lesotho at the 2012 Summer Olympics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 16:15, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

Grabbing for a review tonight/tomorrow. Miyagawa (talk) 16:15, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

• Background: Munich was part of West Germany at the time.
  •  Done MWright96 (talk) 05:26, 29 October 2016 (UTC)
• Move "Lesotho would participate in the Summer Olympics from 27 July to 12 August 2012." to the end of the paragraph, otherwise you're talking about old Olympics, then the London one, and then old Olympics again. This way, it'll link between the two paragraphs.
  •  Done MWright96 (talk) 05:26, 29 October 2016 (UTC)
• Athletics: "Ramonene stopped several times on his run, and reduced his pace when approaching The Mall and medical personnel were required to revive him." It doesn't actually say he collapsed in the article body, only in the lead.
  • Fixed MWright96 (talk) 05:26, 29 October 2016 (UTC)
• Typo on Syndey
  • Rectified. MWright96 (talk) 05:26, 29 October 2016 (UTC)
• Swimming: "She was drawn into the first heat of the women's 50 metre freestyle" - perhaps "drawn in" instead - otherwise it sounds like she was lured in somehow.
  •  Done MWright96 (talk) 05:26, 29 October 2016 (UTC)

• Other than that, all good. Miyagawa (talk) 22:15, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

Thank you again for reviewing Miyagawa. I have made the necessary changes. MWright96 (talk) 05:26, 29 October 2016 (UTC)

No problem - everything looks good and I'm happy to pass it for GA. Miyagawa (talk) 09:55, 29 October 2016 (UTC)