Talk:Laura Robson/GA1

GA Review

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Hello. I will be doing the GA review for this article. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

• Per MOS:DASH, endashes should be used for ranges of numbers, wins/loses, and scores. So... 6-2 should be 6–2.
• There seems to be an extra comma of something here: an oil executive with Royal Dutch Shell,[4], and
• Who said, "as soon as she could hold a tennis racquet"? It might be nice to say something like, According to Laura, she began playing "as soon as she could hold a tennis racquet" or According to her parents, Laura began playing "as soon as she could hold a tennis racquet.
• Robson was then given a wildcard into the main draw of the $75,000 ITF in Shrewsbury, Great Britain. - source?
• Returning to the ITF circuit, Robson entered as the fifth seed in the $10,000 event held in Sunderland, England. - source?
• The headers for Career statistics are a bit much. Is there another way that it can be written so that many subheaders aren't used?
• The references need to be better formatted. A few are missing accessdates. I also clicked on a couple of other ones that had authors and dates that need to be added in the reference.

The article will remain on hold for seven days to allow for these changes. Nikki♥311 17:42, 7 March 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for your review. I think I've covered everything (those refs are nasty). Noble Story (talk • contributions) 10:00, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

Ok. One last thing, then before I look back over the article:

• Robson is currently second on... - this is a time dated statement. Something along the lines of As of (date), Robson is second on...

Nikki♥311 23:55, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

OK, I've got it. Thanks again. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 00:47, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

Great. I've passed the article. Good job! :) Nikki♥311 20:48, 9 March 2009 (UTC)