Talk:King of America/GA1
Latest comment: 1 year ago by BennyOnTheLoose in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 22:16, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
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Copyvio check
- I reviewed the top few matches found using Earwig's Copyvio detector - all sources of 15.3% or more. No concerns. Matches are attributed quotes, titles, or phrases acceptable per WP:LIMITED.
- No issues around close paraphrasing from the offline sources I reviewed.
Images
- No licence issues. FUR provided for the album cover. Image of Burnett is relevant. Caption and positioning are fine, and ALT text is provided.
Background and development
- Spot check on
so the music itself would "shine through...unadorned"
- source has "allowing the tenderness in his music to shine through relatively unadorned"; any reason not to use the "relatively"?
- Re-added
- Spot check on
he stripped the songs of the "musical kinks" and made the words clearer: "I started thinking more about the songs and much less about the records. It became clear to me that I had to write very, very simple songs.
- no issues
Recording
- Spot check on
Over half of the final album's songs were completed in three days
- not quite, per the sources used. Thomson has "Almost half the album was recorded in the first three days;" Hinton has "they cut half the album in three days".
- My bad. Changed to 'About half' as a good in-between
Music and lyrics
- Should "Americana" be capitalised? It is at Americana (music).
- Done
Compared to the studio-driven production of Costello's previous albums,[25][32] King of America features a mostly acoustic sound...
- isn't it something like "In contrast to..."?
- Fixed
O'Riordan received a co-writing credit on "Lovable"
- almost sounds like the credit wasn't deserved. Maybe just use ""co-wrote"?
- Done
is a slower piece
- slower than what? Maybe just "slow"?
- Done
"suffer from self-delusion".
- if this is a direct quote, attribut it to Perone.
- Done
Some commentators interested its inclusion as a possible restatement of the shedding of the Elvis Costello persona
- is it "interpreted" rather than "interested"?
- Yep, fixed
Featuring Jo-El Sonnier on accordion, Perone describes the song as an "easy-going country-Cajun hybrid ballad"
- not sure that stating this with "Featuring Jo-El Sonnier on accordion," quite works.
- Fixed
Packaging
- Spot check on
s "sardonic and knowing"
- no issues a crowd speckled with rhinestones
- typo!
- Fixed
Commentators at the time found his look both "ridiculous" and "serious", both of which capture the spirit of the material itself
- sounds like individual commentators found it both ridiculous and serious; is that the meaning intended?
- Yep, slightly reworded
destroys the premonitions set by Costello's previous cover arts
- "preconception" and "art"/"earlier album covers"?
- Fixed
- Spot check on
The latter nickname was given to Costello by his former producer Nick Lowe due to his tendency to frequently break guitar strings
- no issues
Release
- Spot check on
The label reportedly refused to release the album without including the Costello name
- OK
Critical reception
his best album since Trust (1981) and Imperial Bedroom (1982).
- doesn't quite read right given that they were released in different years, and the following sentence talks about an even earlier album.
- Shortened to "best album in several years"
- As there is only the one subheading in this section, maybe rename the section and lose the subheading?
- That's a holdover from expansion before I added the legacy heading, my bad.
- Spot check on
"still this blighted isle's finest songwriter, a force who, at his best, is simply beyond peer".
- source has "still this blighted isle's finest songwriter, a force, who at his best, is simply beyond peer" (i.e. a comma is in a different place)
- Fixed
Legacy
- You could wikilink to Brill Building (genre)
- Was not aware that was an actual genre; that let's us ditch the quotes around it!
- Spot check on
criticisms of Costello during this time, ... all rooted in King of America,
- reads like the criticisms are rooted in King of America. Might need to be expanded a bit, something like "could all be dated back to King of America"? (I expect you can come up with a better wording.)
- how about "originated on"?
- You could wikilink Spin (magazine) at the first instance.
- Added
Reissues
- Spot check on
Sheffield called the reissue superior to the original album
- OK, given his comments that three named tracks "didn't make the cut, but they should have" for the original.
Track listing / Personnel / Charts / Notes
- Personnel - is the small text appropriate where used? (It may be, I haven't checked guidance or precedents.)
- Fixed
- Best to re-use the Melody Maker ref for note c
- Fixed
Sources
- As a general comment, not related directly to this nomination, you might be interested in getting hold of Griffiths, Dai (2008) Elvis Costello.
- Sources all look good.
Infobox and lead
- Both look good.
Great work, zmbro. I've been waiting for this to appear at GA! Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:38, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- BennyOnTheLoose All set. Thanks for the kind words and picking this up so quickly! :-) – zmbro (talk) (cont) 17:30, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
- I'm passing the article for GA as I'm satisfied that it meets the criteria. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:40, 11 August 2023 (UTC)
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