Talk:Kill the Lights (Britney Spears song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Petergriffin9901 (talk message contribs count logs email) 09:48, 2 September 2011 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • that talks about the singer's relationship -> that alludes too   Done
  • who considered the song a sequel -> it   Done
  • considered, considered   Done
  • rmv did   Done
  • italicize Billboard   Done
  • and visiting another planet full of lights -> I expect better grammar   Done
  • was featured   Done


Background

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  • Link LR   Done
  • confirmed development of the album -> GR (What is this? - Sauloviegas (talk) 09:47, 2 September 2011 (UTC))Reply
  • That long sentence should be separated and proper punctuation should be placed   Done
  • He said he was inspired by Hans Zimmer's scores, such as Pirates of the Caribbean soundtracks -> He credited "" as a primary source of inspiration
  • On November 13, 2008, the song leaked a month before the album's official release -> Th song leaked on November 13, 2008, a full month before the album's official release
  • on the forth season
  • How was it featured? (Played, intro song. etc.?)
  • along with "Circus"' Junior Vasquez Club Circus Remix. -> rmv double quote. Also, better "the Junior Vasquez Club Circus Remix of "Circus".

Composition

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  • The sample needs a much more in depth descriptive rational (with sources)
  • that talks about -> again
  • was considered as a sequel of it, -> was considered its sequel
  • the fact that Spears is introduced by Danja as "Our very own Pop princess / Now Queen of Pop" -> Why?
  • claiming the singer's vocals are heavily processed in the song -> while describing her vocals as heavily produced

Reception

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  • "Kill the Lights" received positive reviews from music critics -> NPOV. There are negative reviews as well
  • Too many "ands" being used as connectors
  • Too many "saids"
  • me","
  • Link TS
  • Link Madonna
  • MoS issues. When in quotes, the album should appear 'Blackout'
  • This section needs a lot of tightening
  • On the dated
  • while its host album Circus -> parent
  • sixty-nine on Pop 100,
  • seventy-two on Pop 100 Airplay

Music video

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  • No need to write "Britney.com". -> Official website is enough
  • The winner of the contest would get to see their story becoming a plot for an official music video of a song -> needs significant re-writing
  • for "Kill the Lights" title "Known Everywhere", that was revealed on February 11, 2009, -> Read this out loud. You are missing some things
  • are in the back taking -> background?
  • Right after, wee see an animated Spears -> poor writing; also, your hand appeared to have gone numb while pressing the E key :P
  • he last three lines really need more professional writing

Credits

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References

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  • Several are missing accessdates
    1. 1 should appear in italics and as People, not People.com. Also, you are missing a publisher
  • Same for 2
  • What's with 3?
  • What makes 5 reliable?
  • 6 should appear in a more detailed format
  • Why does Britney.com appear in both italics and not?
  • 10; publisher?
  • 11 needs work
  • Several newspapers require you to use the "cite news" template; #s 22, 23
  • Similar issues persist. Why is Allmusic is italics?
    • Article is now placed on hold. Any questions and/or concerns will be replied to here. Good luck.--CallMeNathanTalk2Me 03:36, 3 September 2011 (UTC)Reply
      • I think I have fixed everything. Take a look and tell me if there is something still. :) - Sauloviegas (talk) 17:21, 3 September 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • It's kind of weird reading it saying that there are "mixed" reviews, when only one review here is actually negative, if it must be qualified, it should say "mostly positive reviews", so I'm going to change it to that. --WikiDonn (talk) 06:13, 1 October 2011 (UTC)Reply