Talk:Kellie Loder/GA1
Latest comment: 10 years ago by Lemonade51 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 15:02, 27 June 2013 (UTC)
Apologies for having to wait three months or so for a review. At first glance, this needs minimal imput...
- Would you ordinarily hyphenate 'talent search'?
- Could do with a direct ref for "...her mother frequently placed headphones on her stomach while Loder was still in the womb, and Loder kicked to the beat of Michael W. Smith's music"
- Direct ref for 'Loder referred to the music professionals she met as part of the award package (including Scott Mansfield, Mark Peddle, and NewManiac Studios' Peter Newman) as "the top players."'
- And again for the sentence "Loder said that she was surprised by the large turnout for the event."
- "The Telegram called her voice "powerful yet serene and soulful", and her songs have been played on CBC Radio." What is the relationship between these two statements?
- I'm having trouble getting this ref to work. I take it this is a video which has limited availability to outside regions?
- Refs with The Nor'wester, The Telegram, The Advertiser, The Charlatan need locations.
No dab or dead links. A well-written and factual article on the whole. Placing this on hold for a week. Lemonade51 (talk) 15:02, 27 June 2013 (UTC)
- I have added direct references for the three statements you indicated, split the Telegram/CBC sentence in two, and added locations for the newspaper sources. I hyphenated "talent search" to indicate that it is functioning as an adjective in the sentence; because the reference is to a talent-search contest rather than just to a talent search, my impression is that the hyphen is required, but I can rephrase the sentence if you would like. The CJON-DT video isn't appearing for me either. CJON-DT is a Newfoundland television station and I am no longer located in Newfoundland, so you may be right that the video is only available to people in Newfoundland. It is also possible that the video is no longer online. Whether the video is online or not, it is a video that exists apart from the internet and should be citable as such. What would you recommend? Neelix (talk) 18:50, 30 June 2013 (UTC)
- Hmmm, I imagine the video aired on NTV's main news bulletin as it says on the link 'NTV’s Don Bradshaw reports'. I do agree -- the link should be cited, but for safe measure you could cite the program (NTV Evening News), its airdate (6 April 2012) and the network to go along with it. This is something you may want to consider should you wish to take this up to FAC, but it has no bearing on meeting this criteria. Don't think I have ever come across talent search as a hyphenated word, but your reasoning is sound (was thinking along the same lines as the only possible explanation – just not as clear as yours, hence why I asked to be sure). Happy to pass nonetheless. :) Lemonade51 (talk) 19:29, 30 June 2013 (UTC)
- I have added direct references for the three statements you indicated, split the Telegram/CBC sentence in two, and added locations for the newspaper sources. I hyphenated "talent search" to indicate that it is functioning as an adjective in the sentence; because the reference is to a talent-search contest rather than just to a talent search, my impression is that the hyphen is required, but I can rephrase the sentence if you would like. The CJON-DT video isn't appearing for me either. CJON-DT is a Newfoundland television station and I am no longer located in Newfoundland, so you may be right that the video is only available to people in Newfoundland. It is also possible that the video is no longer online. Whether the video is online or not, it is a video that exists apart from the internet and should be citable as such. What would you recommend? Neelix (talk) 18:50, 30 June 2013 (UTC)