Talk:Karma Man/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:58, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
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Looks like I'll be the one moving forward with this review! --K. Peake 08:58, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
edit- Infobox looks good!
- "of Bowie's career." → "of the singer's career."
- The music sentence should be before the meaning one since this is the correct order, also maybe Buddhist themes should be changed to something else in this sentence when the order is switched for context?
- Pipe compilation to Compilation album
- Done
- "on Bowie at the Beeb in 2000." → "on his compilation album, Bowie at the Beeb (2000)." to be less repetitive
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- Yeah that works. --K. Peake 11:16, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
- Remove English rock band introduction to Suede and the years of the songs, as this is not notable info for the lead
- Done
- Remove the same session part because this is implied
- Done
- "with the entire Toy album" → "with the entire project" and maybe add a sentence about the single release afterwards?
Background and recording
edit- Img looks good!
- Mention the release year of Bowie's self-titled album
- Done
- "turned it down" → "turned the offer down"
- Done
- "after Bowie's desire to write" → "after his desire to write" unless this term means "after he had a desire to write..." then reword appropriately (I can't see the original source so do not know this)
- The latter, done
- "and Visconti's then-wife Siegrid," → "and Tony's then-wife Siegrid Visconti," per MOS:SAMESURNAME
- Done
- "Visconti later expressed" → "Tony Visconti later expressed"
- Done
Composition
edit- "from his debut album," → "from David Bowie,"
- Done
- "Featuring an homage to" → "Featuring a homage to"
- Done
- "More positive in tone" is referring to an interview not the song, so this part should be reworded to reflect that
- The penultimate sentence of the first para should have the ref at the end of it per quotes being used
- Done, all stated by O'Leary
- Pipe sharps to Sharp (music)
- Done
- "is mostly in" → "is mostly set in"
- Done
- Pipe string arrangement to String section
- Done
Release and aftermath
edit- Pipe compilation to Compilation album
- Done
- "and sung to the melody" → "being sung to the melody" or "and is sung to the melody", depending on if it is these words or the whole song
- Done
- The ref should also be invoked after the above sentence because there is a quote used
- Mention Suede's debut album being self-titled
- Done
- "in 1993, which generated publicity" → "in 1993; this generated publicity" to be less repetitive
- Done
Toy version
edit- Infobox looks good!
- "Bowie wrote and recorded" → "he wrote and recorded"
- Done
- "so to prevent" → "as so to prevent"
- Done
- Remove the online leak because it is notable when this song was not leaked, especially when the one article notes two did not leak
Personnel
edit- Good
Notes
edit- Note 1 should not invoke ref 1 since that is already used at the end of the sentence
- Done
References
edit- Copyvio score looks somewhat high at 45.4%; cut down quoting from Rolling Stone and David Bowie blog to fix this
- Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 15
- Wikilink The Guardian on ref 18
- Wikilink NME on ref 21
- Above three done
Sources
edit- Good
Final comments and verdict
edit- On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 12:48, 21 March 2022 (UTC)