Talk:Just Cause 2/GA1

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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 18:55, 19 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

"developed by Swedish developer" — Minimize repetition, remove "Swedish developer".
"destroy government property on Panau for Chaos points. These Chaos points" — Minimize repetition, remove second "Chaos".
"They worked with" — Clarify: "Avalanche Studios worked with".
"generally-positive" — Remove the hymen--I mean, hyphen.

Establish that it is played from a third-person view and link to Third-person shooter.

"According to Johansson" — Clarify: "According to Peter Johansson".
"The team also refined parachute" — Fix grammar: "The team also refined the parachute".
"an island with a variety landscapes" — Fix grammar: "an island with a variety of landscapes".
IGN (source 22) is dead. Archive or replace it.
PRNewswire (source 23) does not seem to connect.
"allows the user to capture gameplay video and export it to the XMB or upload it to YouTube from the game" — "from the game" is unnecessary when gameplay recording is already established.

"A sequel to Just Cause was announced" can be simplified with "Just Cause 2 was announced".

"generally-positive" — There it is, again.
"the game was widely regarded as a significant improvement of its predecessor" — Fix grammar: "the game was widely regarded as a significant improvement to its predecessor".
Add website=VG247 to source 52.
"The explosion was praised for its visual effects" — I think what is meant is "The explosions were praised for their visual effects".
Source 51 should be updated with this and put website=IGN instead of "Pc.ign.com".
"Kevin VanOrd of GameSpot and Ryan Clements of IGN noted a number of gameplay problems" — Keep it short, but establish what the gameplay problems were.
"and travelling between locations was so enjoyable that players would rarely use the black marketeer" — If this is what VanOrd said, just prefix the sentence with "and stated that".
"The game's difficulty and artificial intelligence were criticized as frustrating, sometimes spawning in front of the player" — What spawns in front of the player?
"the standard and presentation of its cutscene was not on a par with the game world" — Fix grammar: "the standard and presentation of its cutscenes were not on par with the game world".

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: The article has minor, but noticeable problems with references, grammar and prose.
Pass/Fail:
Cognissonance (talk) 21:27, 19 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

@Cognissonance: Thanks for the review! I have addressed all the issues. AdrianGamer (talk) 10:54, 20 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

Pass/Fail:
@AdrianGamer: Cognissonance (talk) 11:23, 20 October 2016 (UTC)Reply