Talk:Jonathan Lucroy/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Therapyisgood (talk · contribs) 23:08, 2 February 2022 (UTC)

Will look at this shortly. Therapyisgood (talk) 23:08, 2 February 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• Lucroy began catching during his Little League Baseball career odd to call "Little League Baseball" a "career"
  • Reworded.

• he became the face of the franchise after Ryan Braun was implicated in the Biogenesis scandal. this is an extraordinary claim that requires a citation in the lead
  • Added.

• Lucroy also collected a number of honors no need for "also"
  • Removed.

• Umatilla High School officially retired no need for "officially"
  • Removed.

• Archive on ref 8 leads to OS home page.
  • Replaced.

• where his RBI-leading performance team or league?
  • League. Specified.

• There is no need to use the open access template on newspapers.com references, it's not really open source. I wouldn't use anything on them.
  • Removed all.

• That summer, Lucroy returned to the FCSL, this time helping no need for "this time"
  • Removed.

• while Louisiana–Lafayette clinched a spot in the 2007 NCAA Division I Baseball Tournament.[24] While two "whiles" too close together.
  • Removed second.

• Following his breakout 2008 season no need for "breakout"
  • Removed entire phrase.

• blowout loss no need for "blowout"
  • Removed.

• how did the Brewers finish the 2012 season?
  • Added.

• a potentially season-ending injury, not sure this is needed.
  • Removed.

• Bryan Holaday and Bobby Wilson, who had been platooning explain what "platooning" is in parenthesis.
  • I don't believe this is necessary, as the term is linked. Specified that they were platooning the position, though.

• to bolster a starting lineup entirely in their 20s. starting pitching lineup or starting batting lineup?
  • Mostly pitching, but as their starting catcher was 25, I reworded.

• reporters,"We're all running together. space after comma
  • Done.

• while throwing out 26 percent of attempted base runners a note on how this compares to other catchers in MLB would be appreciated.
  • I have not been able to find a source that I would consider reliable on this without delving into OR territory, as the number fluctuates fairly regularly.

• backstop → catcher
  • Changed.

• on July 29 in order to make room no need for "in order"
  • Removed.

• "Washington Nationals (2021)" this header should really be "Philadelphia Phillies, Chicago White Sox and Washington Nationals (2021)"
  • Replaced, although I personally disagree, as he never appeared in games for the other two teams.

• In "Oakland Athletics": link "40-man roster"
  • Done.

• he did make a brief postseason appearance this can be confusing to people who really don't know baseball when you say he made a "postseason appearance" but he didn't actually play for any teams.
  • Reworded.

• All files need personality rights templates at the Commons, see Commons:Template:Personality rights.
  • Added to all.

• Location used in ref 17 but not elsewhere.
  • It is used there to distinguish the Opelousas Daily World from the ones in Vancouver, Aberdeen, Atlanta, and Greene County. I added the location in the one other source where the Daily World is cited, but feel no need to add it to sources like, say, the Milwaukee Journal Sentinel.

• Don't start sentences with a year per MOS:NUMNOTES ("2013 was also the first season where Lucroy saw action at first base"). Therapyisgood (talk) 00:37, 3 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Rephrased.

Therapyisgood I am working on your comments. Been having some physical health issues that limit my screen time. Shouldn't take me more than a few days. Thank you for picking up this review. — GhostRiver 19:12, 10 February 2022 (UTC)

Therapyisgood I have responded to all of your comments. — GhostRiver 17:45, 11 February 2022 (UTC)

• Passing. Therapyisgood (talk) 20:28, 14 February 2022 (UTC)