Talk:John Grant (Gunpowder Plot)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 13:10, 30 September 2010 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be reviewing this article for potential GA status. My review should be posted shortly. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 13:10, 30 September 2010 (UTC)

I've opted to pass this as GA, and leave the below as suggestions for further improvement. Nikkimaria (talk) 22:49, 30 September 2010 (UTC)

Thanks. Comments below. Parrot of Doom 08:00, 1 October 2010 (UTC)

Writing and formatting

• Given the length of the article, the lead should be 3 paragraphs at most
  • Its not so much a case of length with the lead, more that the lead is divided into the three most important parts of the story. I've merged the first two, however.
• "Grant was born some time around 1570" -> "Grant was born around 1570"?
  • Done.
• Don't link the same term multiple times, especially not in close proximity
  • You'll have to point that one out.
    • Catesby and Wintour are both linked twice in Plot
• Explain/link "poursuivants"?
  • Its just an English word, there are dictionaries for that :)
• "Grant likely stored weapons and ammunition there" - "there" being Norbrook or Lapworth?
  • Done.
• "on Monday 4 November Grant and a friend were to be found at the Red Lion inn" - phrasing is slightly awkward
  • I think this might be because Wikipedia doesn't allow a "the" betweeen 4 and November, as I read it aloud it sounds ok to me. I've switched Dunchurch and inn around.
• "en route" is common enough that it need not be italicized
  • I'll leave that for others to decide, as I tend to agree.
• "Thus, as the plot moved closer to fruition, on Monday 4 November Grant and a friend were to be found at the Red Lion inn, in Dunchurch, with the newly-recruited Everard Digby and his "hunting party".[nb 3] The group attended a mass the next morning, before moving on.[16] ... Tipped off by an anonymous letter to William Parker, 4th Baron Monteagle, late on Monday night the authorities made a search of Parliament. There they discovered Fawkes guarding the gunpowder the plotters had placed in the undercroft beneath the House of Lords.[15] Catesby and the others, en route to the Midlands, were alerted to his arrest by those conspirators who had since fled London. Together they rode to Dunchurch and met Digby and his party" - chronology is somewhat unclear here given the overlap between section
  • I've attempted to improve it, there may be one or two too many "had"s though.
• "Fawkes's accomplices" or "Fawkes' accomplices"?
  • Read aloud, the former I think.
• "2 pm that afternoon" - is this 6 or 7 November?
  • I've added clarification of the arrival of the sheriff, but I may put the entire "on 7 november" line in as a note. Depends how many people find it confusing, which I must admit it is (slightly).
• Be consistent in how times are formatted
  • Done.
• "a mass" or "a Mass"?
  • Done, thanks for a very thorough GA review :) Parrot of Doom 08:00, 1 October 2010 (UTC)

Accuracy and verifiability

• What is the name of the author for Further reading?
  • Its already there?
    • Yes, but is it S.J. Francis Edwards or Francis S.J. Edwards?
• Format Further reading the same as References
  • Done.
    • Publisher?

Broad

• If any further information about his background is available, I would suggest adding it
  • He was a minor player, so I don't think there's much else available. Parrot of Doom 08:02, 1 October 2010 (UTC)

Neutrality

No issues noted

Stability

No issues noted

Images

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