Talk:Jesper Fast/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 15:54, 19 January 2015 (UTC)

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

   see lede comments below

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   On hold for 7 days for concerns to be addressed.  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 23:00, 27 January 2015 (UTC)

Well Written

• There should be a non-breaking space -   between a number and the unit of measurement.
  • Are you referring to the references to weight (like 20 pounds)? I've added it to those. Or would this also apply to such things as number of goals, assists, points, etc.? Let me know and I can add them wherever necessary. — Hunter Kahn 03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• "In 2009–10, Fast recorded 49 points (23 goals, 26 assists), SuperElit" - this sentence doesn't make sense.
  • I think it did, actually, but I added "which were" to clarify further. :) — Hunter Kahn 02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• Link to Rinkens riddare
  • Done. — Hunter Kahn 02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• "he injured he knee" - should be "he injured his knee"
  • Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• "who play in Sweden" - should be "who plays in Sweden"
  • Are you sure about that? It refers to two people, not one. — Hunter Kahn 02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• "teammates like Tanner Glass" - who else noted his ability to make responsible decisions and skillful plays?
  • I'm not sure I understand your questions? — Hunter Kahn 02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• I'm not very familiar with the citation format, but why does every reference contain the "|archiveurl=" parameter?
  • In just about every article I edit, I use WebCite to created an archived version of the article. That way in the future, if the original website for the source were to disappear (WP:LINKROT) there will be a backup archived version. — Hunter Kahn 02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• "exceeded most observers' expectations" - I don't see a FN which cites that
  • The Swedish language source in the next citation that follows the next sentence makes multiple references to Fast exceeding expectations in that season. I didn't think an inline citation at the end of that sentence was necessary because I thought the citation at the end of the last sentence covered it, but I added it to both sentences to clarify. — Hunter Kahn 02:04, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• The lead should be expanded a little.
  • I've expanded the lead, let me know if you think it's good now. — Hunter Kahn 03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

References

• Restoring this with a reference would help.
  • I really don't understand why someone would simply delete a whole section of an article with accurate and easy-to-verify information rather than add sources, add a "sources needed" tag or seek someone to update it. Really annoying. Anyway, I've added it back with sources. — Hunter Kahn 03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• Correct me if I'm wrong, but FN2 does not include any information about his date of birth
  • Yeah, you're correct, not sure what happened there, but it's fixed now. — Hunter Kahn 03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• The height and weight in the infobox needs to be referenced
  • Done. (And in fact, the weight was out-of-date, so it's updated now. — Hunter Kahn 03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

Broad in Coverage

• The first two sentences in Junior Career doesn't belong in that section.
  • This might be a little WP:IAR, but I think it should stay here. It obviously belongs in the article, but probably belongs in an "Early life" section or something like that. But I think it would be sort of ridiculous to make such a section for only two sentences. But that being said, if that's the solution required for this GAN to pass, I'll do it. — Hunter Kahn 03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
• "who play in Sweden" - mentioning the league would be helpful
  • Done. — Hunter Kahn 03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

Images

• Include a caption for the image in the infobox
  • There actually already was a caption written in the infobox, but it wasn't showing up because it was mistakenly written as "image_caption" rather than just "caption." That's fixed now. — Hunter Kahn 03:37, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

Overall

• @Hunter Kahn:. I don't actually know about five in Well Written section, and I was referring to an older revision of the page for six in the Well Writen section. I've had one more read through for the lead. Passing the article. Congrats!  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 15:11, 28 January 2015 (UTC)