Talk:Jared Leto/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 23:45, 4 October 2014 (UTC)

Here is my assessment of whether this article meets the GA criteria:

• Is it well-written?: Needs some work. It's fine to have all occupations in infobox, but the opening sentence of the lead should just focus on his most prominent ones; his singing and his acting. In "early life", Shannon Leto should only be linked here and in the lead per WP:OVERLINK. Saying "the son of Constance" could suggest there are no other brothers, so I'd change this to "a son of". It would help to include the names of his father, stepparents, and half-brothers, and perhaps some of his father's heritage since it is mentioned that his mother has Cajun ancestry. Guinness World Records should be italicized- it is a book as well as an award. In "philanthropy", the information on LGBT's and Barack Obama would be better under a "politics" subsection.

• Is it verifiable?: Not quite. These are unreferenced statements; "The same year, he made his television film debut starring alongside Alicia Silverstone in Cool and the Crazy, and landed his first film role in the 1995 drama How to Make an American Quilt. He later co-starred with Christina Ricci in The Last of the High Kings (1996) and got a supporting role in Switchback (1997)", "In 1999, Leto played a gay high school teacher who attracts the attentions of Robert Downey, Jr. in Black and White, and got a supporting role in the drama Girl, Interrupted, an adaptation of the memoir of the same name by Susanna Kaysen. He then portrayed Angel Face in Fight Club (1999), a film adaptation of Chuck Palahniuk's novel of the same name, directed by David Fincher", "The band heavily toured in support of the album and played at several major festivals, including Roskilde, Pinkpop, Rock am Ring, and Download", "Dallas Buyers Club received widespread critical acclaim and became a financial success, resulting in various accolades for Leto, who was awarded the Academy Award for Best Supporting Actor, Golden Globe Award for Best Supporting Actor – Motion Picture, Screen Actors Guild Award for Outstanding Performance by a Male Actor in a Supporting Role and a variety of film critics' circle awards for the role", and "This Is War reached the top ten of several national album charts and earned numerous music awards". Be sure to also check the references, I found dead links. The following references in place are questionable/unreliable; Daily Mail, "Salon", "PopSugar", "abeautifullie.org", "Fashionisto", "Pajiba", London Evening Standard, "Interia.pl", "Ground Control", "TechCrunch", The Inquisitr, "Look to the Stars"

• Is it broad in coverage?: Not enough. In the "awards and nominations" section, there should be a paragraph or two discussing Leto's major achievements such as Academy Awards, Golden Globes, and MTV Video Music Awards. In the "filmography" section, there should be a listing (without a table box) of films Leto has been featured in. A referral link isn't enough to warrant a separate section. While there's lots of detail on his career, this article is missing some crucial information on him. Specifically, there's nothing on his artistry; it should discuss his musical and acting styles, what critics have specifically said of him (as opposed to films/albums/Thirty seconds as a whole), and who influenced him. I see critics' comments for specific roles, but there should be some more broad descriptions of him as a whole for this. See FA's like Ringo Starr or GA's like Madonna for good examples. Outside of this, there should also be detail on his dating life; I see no mention of his relationship with (and engagement to) Cameron Diaz in the article. A "personal life" section isn't necessarily required, though- his high-profile dating life could potentially be intertwined within a whole "life and career" section along with his "early life" and "career" sections.

• Is it neutral?: Mostly, though "numerous" (used in some instances), "devastating tremor", and "first notable" are POV.

• Is it stable?: Yes

• Is it illustrated, if possible, with images?: Yes

As there are too many problems right now to place this on hold, I'm failing this nomination. Better luck next time. A peer review could help before renominating. I noticed this had one back in 2011, but much has changed since.