Talk:Japanese destroyer Shii/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 23:02, 2 August 2020 (UTC)

• "Mid-year the destroyer was turned over to the United States and subsequently scrapped." - My gut says there should be a comma after Mid-year, but I'm not 100% sure. What do you think?
  • Short prepatory phrases like this or "x month" often have a comma after them, but it's not required.
• " They had a range of 4,680 nautical miles (8,670 km; 5,390 mi) at 16 knots (30 km/h; 18 mph)" - Same comment as in the other review. Starting out with "The ships" is too repetitive, but "They" isn't great either, because the subject of the preceeding sentence is the turbines, so they could be interpreted as the turbines. Maybe "The class was designed to have a range of ...", but then that also has a start of "The". Not sure what's best here.
  • I've done the same thing here as I did for Odake, which I hope is satisfactory.
• "They could deliver their 60 depth charges via two stern racks and two throwers" - Like with the other review. Infobox gives rails, not racks, I've always seen rails as the more standard term.
• "On 5 June Shii struck a mine in the Bungo Strait" - Comma after June?
  • See above
• Link Kure. Me, as well as most readers, will have no idea where Kure is, except most likely in Japan.
• There's a big inconsistency here: Infobox says given to the Soviets on 5 July 1947, text says given to the US on 4 July 1947. You're citing Jentschura et al. for the US turnover, although Nevitt gives the Soviet explanation.
  • Oops.
• Nevitt states that the ship fought against Allied planes on 24 July 1945, this should be mentioned, especially since this article is rather thin.
  • That date is when the USN attacks Kure and other targets on the Inland Sea, but Hirado is nowhere near there and I can find no mention of any airstrikes on Hirado in anything that I have available to me. Without confirmation from an Allied source, I'm very reluctant to add this as she could have engaged Japanese aircraft by mistake.
• Do we know what the Soviets did with the ship after they got it? I understand a lot of the USSR records still aren't really available, so unknown's okay.
  • <ruefully>I didn't intend to nominate any of the ships that went to the Soviets until I felt up to translating the Russian. But I obviously mixed up the disposition of this ship with one that went to the Americans.

That's it, I think. The disposition inconsistency is the only major issue here. Placing on hold. Hog Farm _Bacon 01:43, 3 August 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:19, 6 August 2020 (UTC)