Talk:Isabelle Eberhardt/GA1
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:19, 18 October 2015 (UTC)
I'll finish this soon. JAGUAR 18:19, 18 October 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments edit
- I feel that the lead could be expanded slightly in order to summarise the article better per WP:LEAD. A couple of sentences regarding her life or writing career would be fine
- "and the general had hired" - should General be capitalised here? I'm not sure myself
- I don't think so. See General officer. Freikorp (talk) 13:18, 19 October 2015 (UTC)
- "Eventually Nathalie took their children" - comma between "eventually" and "Nathalie"
- "telling her that her half-brother Augustin joined the French Foreign Legion" - link French Foreign Legion
- "who had taken out a newspaper ad seeking a pen pal" - informal, try advertisement
- Just a suggestion, you could split some of the "Life in North Africa" section into a "Later life" or "Later life and death" section
- It might be worth splitting the Publications list into two columns
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On hold edit
This is a very well written article and I couldn't find anything major to bring up. Once all of the above are clarified, this should be good to go. Well done on the work here, this was an interesting read. JAGUAR 12:47, 19 October 2015 (UTC)