Talk:Illicit Affairs/GA1

Latest comment: 9 months ago by Gained in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pamzeis (talk · contribs) 13:34, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

I'll review this one. Will try not to screw anything up. Pamzeis (talk) 13:34, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Prose

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  • and some picked it as an album highlight — is this lead-worthy? If it's only "some" critics?
  • It received a silver certification from the British Phonographic Industry (BPI). — I also don't think this is lead worthy; it's not particularly impressive (for Swift, at least)
  • I've moved some stuff around in #Background and composition, which I hope you don't mind. You can revert me if you disagree
  • Swift recorded an stripped-down — what does "stripped-down" mean??

It means that there are fewer instruments used for a particular recording compared to the original. If this still confuse you, I would remove it. Gained (talk) 14:16, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

  • journalists described it — is "it" referring to the song or Swift's performance or the song's bridge or Swift's performance of said bridge?
  • her 2018 single "Getaway Car" — I don't think it's necessary to say "Getaway Car" was a single—it was only one in Australia and New Zealand (so it's not really well known as a single) and being a single wasn't a defining characteristic (if that makes sense)
  • lauded of how Swift "outdone herself" — doesn't seem grammatically correct to me. If it is tho, then it doesn't read very well
  • In a 2022 review — it's not exactly a review; I think it would be more accurate to refer to this as a ranking

  Done all except where noted. Gained (talk) 14:16, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Sourcing

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  • Critics often praised — Source?

  Done Gained (talk) 14:24, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

They are a member since 2018 but that's it, so I ommited it. Gained (talk) 14:24, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

  • Are Beats Per Minute and Sputnikmusic reliable?

Both reviews are included in Metacritic, which aggregates reviews from "major" mainstream critics to provide ratings of albums. Gained (talk) 14:24, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

  • Spotchecks (Version reviewed):
    • fn 1: doesn't seem to support after the cancellation of a concert tour in support of her previous studio album Lover (2019)
    • fn 13:  Y
    • fn 19:  Y
    • fn 31:  Y (though "vocally astounding" tells the reader a lot more about what the critic thought than "marvellous" IMO)

Good point. Gained (talk) 14:36, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

    • fn 37:  Y

  Done all except the fn 1 and where noted. Gained (talk) 14:24, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Other than that, I think this article's good to go. Ping me in any replies! Pamzeis (talk) 13:34, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

@Pamzeis, I have addressed all of your comments except fn1, which I will be doing tomorrow. Gained (talk) 14:25, 7 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
@Pamzeis, I have remove fn1 and its info because I don't think it will disturb anything to the article. Gained (talk) 02:29, 8 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
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Second look

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Went through the article a second time and made a few copy-edits. I have one comment tho:

  • her fury takes it down in the process — is a bit confusing. What is "it"? How does fury take something down? What process?

That's it! If you could clarify that for me, I think this would be good to go! Pamzeis (talk) 05:48, 8 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

  Done. I hope it makes sense. Gained (talk) 06:29, 8 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
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Third look

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Looks good!   Passing the article. Pamzeis (talk) 11:20, 8 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Thank you! Gained (talk) 11:33, 8 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
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