Talk:Ice trade/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Hchc2009 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 13:54, 13 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

initial review

Storage

  • "Science of. Need to avoid water collecting, as water melted ice faster than warm air." - typo or something?
  • "By 1840s, warehouses by the Pond up to 36,000 square feet" , don't know what this means
  • "Ice houses called depots were also built in the major ice consuming cities " - does this mean that they were only called depots in cities?
  • "Household refrigerators being manufactured in the 1840s on the east coast, most notably by Darius Eddy of Massachusetts and Winship of Boston; " - not a complete sentence
  • "Differences in 19th century American and European attitudes to adding ice directly to drinks;" - not a complete sentence

Commercial applications

  • "It was quickly found that placing meat directly on top of blocks of ice in cars caused it to go off;" - go bad? fall off?
  • Should you credit the illustration to Harper's Weekly, 30 August 1884; Author F. Ray? I know you don't have to but it might be a nice touch.
  • All in all, I think this is a wonderful article. Very well written. MathewTownsend (talk) 22:12, 14 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Should be all fixed now - verbs are in short supply in the UK at the moment, due to the recession, so they had to be used sparingly in the later parts of the article! :)
  • Many indeed thanks for the review, it was much appreciated. Hchc2009 (talk) 07:12, 15 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Should I send you some verbs by internet express? Don't want you to suffer! MathewTownsend (talk) 18:19, 16 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

GA review-see WP:WIAGA for criteria (and here for what they are not)

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    a. prose: clear and concise, respects copyright laws, correct spelling and grammar: 
    b. complies with MoS for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:  
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    a. provides references to all sources in the section(s) dedicated to footnotes/citations according to the guide to layout:  
    b. provides in-line citations from reliable sources where necessary:  
    c. no original research:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic:  
    b. it remains focused and does not go into unnecessary detail (see summary style):  
  4. Does it follow the neutral point of view policy.
    fair representation without bias:  
  5. Is it stable?
    no edit wars, etc:  
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    a. images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:  
    b. images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  

Great article. Congratulations! MathewTownsend (talk) 18:19, 16 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

Cheers! Hchc2009 (talk) 18:25, 16 July 2012 (UTC)Reply