Talk:Ice Hockey Hair/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Cavie78 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:15, 21 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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Recording and themes

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  • The captions of the sound files are very long. One sentence will suffice. Instead, you should elaborate on the musical composition details in the prose; there is not much detail of this. Also, the titles of the files are too long. The artist should definitely be removed, and the year at then end is up to you (I prefer to exclude it).
    • I appreciate what you mean but there's not really much more to say on musical composition. I decided not to have a dedicated 'Music' section as the 'Recording and themes' includes all the quotes I could find from the band and one of the songs on the EP is just a remix while the other is an instrumental. I don't think the captions are excessive - I've seen much longer captions on FAs. I'd rather not change the files names I'm afraid - they are meaningful and I can't find anything that suggests they're unacceptable (see Wikipedia:Image file names)

Release and reception

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  • Link NME   Done
  • "awarding Ice Hockey Hair 'single of the week'" - would they not be referring to the song here? If so, it needs to be place in quote marks, not italics
  • The 'Accolades' section should be in prose only
    • Accolades sections appear in lots of music articles including FAs. I include information in the prose but I see nothing wrong with also having a table.

Music videos

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  • This section is very long considering it is almost all plot summary
    • I am aware of this and have already trimmed the "Smokin'" section but it's hard to do with "Ice Hockey Hair"
  • Has there been no critical commentary on either video?
    • Unfortunately not. The British music press (who would be most likely to comment) don't really provide criticism of music videos, even for much bigger bands.
  • Are these videos even relevant to the EP?
    • I don't see why they wouldn't be to be honest.

Track listing

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Credits

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  • Source?
    •   Done Again I don't think this needs a cite but it's less clear cut than track listings so have included.

Singles chart position

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  • This should be in prose, under a 'Chart performance' or 'commercial reception' section
    • It already is - see comments about the 'Accolades' table.

References

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  • You need to provide the ISSN number of the NME magazines that do not have links
    • This isn't a requirement at GA, see WP:WIAGA
  • Allmusic, Drowned in Sound, BBC and Pitchfork Media should not be in italics   Done
On hold now, awaiting improvements. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:50, 21 November 2010 (UTC)Reply