Talk:I'm Afraid of Americans/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Realmaxxver in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Realmaxxver (talk · contribs) 20:31, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
Adding comments soon. Realmaxxver (talk) 20:31, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
- Realmaxxver Thanks for reviewing. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 02:28, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
Comments
edit- "The song was co-written by Bowie and Brian Eno and originally recorded during the sessions for Bowie's 1995 album Outside. This version was released on the soundtrack of the 1995 film Showgirls." → "Co-written by Bowie and Brian Eno, It was originally recorded during the sessions for Bowie's 1995 album Outside; this version was released on the soundtrack of the 1995 film Showgirls."
- Done
- "while the 'Johnny' of the former craves objects of status through self-entitlement, the 'Johnny' of the latter emotional abuses his wife due to his lower status.[11]" I think there is a typo at "emotional" → "while the 'Johnny' of the former craves objects of status through self-entitlement, the 'Johnny' of the latter emotionally abuses his wife due to his lower status.[11]"
- Fixed
- "O'Leary writes that the remake retained the original's "'laughing' hook" and "synth hook pinging around an E♭ octave." missing quotation mark near the end
- Fixed
- "According to Spitz, the video received heavy rotation on MTV, a first for Bowie in over a decade.[10] It also earned Bowie a nomination for Best Male Video at the 1998 MTV Video Music Awards.[5]" → "According to Spitz, the video received heavy rotation on MTV, a first for Bowie in over a decade;[10] and also earned Bowie a nomination for Best Male Video at the 1998 MTV Video Music Awards.[5]"
- Fine as is. Reads like a comma splice hidden by a semi-colon
- "The same year, Phillips opinioned that "The title is a picture-perfect distillation of what it means to live in this world."[26]" → "The same year, Lior Phillips of Consequence of Sound opinioned that "The title is a picture-perfect distillation of what it means to live in this world."[26]"
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- Finished with prose comments. Realmaxxver (talk) 22:04, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
Image review
edit- Images are fine, I would suggest maybe a better image for Trent Reznor, maybe File:Trent Reznor with Nine Inch Nails -- California, 21 May 2009.jpg? (just remember to change the direction that the image is aligned to the left)
- Prefer this one. We already have a quote box on the left. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 02:28, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
- Okay. Passing now. Realmaxxver (talk) 15:16, 22 February 2022 (UTC)
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