Talk:Hygrophorus agathosmus/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk) 23:55, 24 January 2010 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

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Interesting note- I got down the Roger Phillips book on which I normally base my fungi articles, and this one isn't mentioned. Is it not found in the UK?

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   Couple of notes below

   B. MoS compliance:

   Ditto.

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

   Not loving the sourcing of the Commanster image in the caption- a better caption would note something of interest that the picture shows, as the cap picture does.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   On hold for now

• "R.W.G. Dennis" I appreciate that he is probably better known by this name, but the full names of other mycologists have been given in the prose- consistency is normally a good thing
• "subsection Camarophylli" Could one or both of these words be linked?
• "characterized by the absence of a gelatinous outer veil, and a dry stem." Is this an absence of a dry stem, or the possession of a dry stem? Not clear.
• "fibrils" link?
• "fine whitish powder (pruinose)" Not clear from the context what "pruinose" means. Is it the name of the powder? An adjective describing a mushroom with the powder? Or a mushroom with the powder and fibrils?
• "Viewed with a light microscope, the basidiospores are 8–10.5 by 4.5–5.5 µm, ellipsoid, smooth, yellowish in Melzer's reagent." Doesn't read well- perhaps an "and" would help.
• "hyphae" link?
• "dark brownish-gray color"- not loving the piped link. If you want to use the word with a link, go for it- if you want to use the phrase, place the word in brackets or don't use it, I'd say.
• "cap cuticle" Linky?
• Why is the similar species section a subsection of "Edibility and antimicrobial activity"?
• "Hygrophorus odoratus is a smaller version" What, literally the same species but smaller? Could this be clarified?
• The other species are presumably notable- until the articles are written, red links are fine. Don't be scared of redlinks!
• "as pure cultures" Link?
• "vegetative fungal inocula" Link(s)?
• Category:Fungi of Asia?

I think this edit will take care of all the excellent suggestions above. Your points below I will keep in mind, as I anticipate working on this article more in the future when some hard-to-get sources become available. Sasata (talk) 03:50, 25 January 2010 (UTC) (p.s. looks like it is in the UK, according to this)

Brilliant work, promoted. J Milburn (talk) 15:16, 25 January 2010 (UTC)

Don't know if you're planning to take this one towards FAC, but I have a few thoughts that could be of use if you are, but, without which, I am happy to pass the article at GAC.

• An expansion of the lead would be good- naturally, as the article expands, hopefully so will the lead, but it looks a little short even now.
• As we both know, one line paragraphs will probably be picked up on :)
• There's perhaps more to be said about similar species- comparison photos could be useful.
• Anything more to be said about the antibacterial functions? Are these useful for wild specimens? Have they been used in folk or actual medicine, or for any purpose beyond "hey, look!" in the lab? What chemical(s) is it that cause the functions?
• On a similar note, is there perhaps more to be said about the planting stock issue?
• The text being bunched between the mycomorphbox and the image may annoy some