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GA Review

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Passed. ZKang123 (talk) 00:26, 11 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

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Reviewer: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 10:10, 6 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

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GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):  
    b (citations to reliable sources):  
    c (OR):  
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):  
    b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

Overall:
Pass/Fail:  

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To begin review soon.--ZKang123 (talk) 10:10, 6 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

  • Copyvio check - The 22.5% similarity for a source is due to direct quote lifting. Others highlighted were just reuses of common phrases. No other outstanding issues.

Lead

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  • "It operated as the 2,000-room Commodore Hotel between 1919 and 1976. Hotel chain Hyatt and real estate developer Donald Trump converted the hotel to the 1,400-room Grand Hyatt New York between 1978 and 1980, encasing the facade in glass and renovating the interior. "
    • Suggest rewriting to: "It operated as the 2,000-room Commodore Hotel between 1919 and 1976, before hotel chain Hyatt and real estate developer Donald Trump converted the hotel to the 1,400-room Grand Hyatt New York between 1978 and 1980."
    • The clause "encasing the facade in glass and renovating the interior." seems unnecessary given it's elaborated in the third paragraph
  • "The hotel was either 26 or 28 stories high" - I guess there are conflicting sources? Maybe mention the overall height (in feet) instead in the lead? Sounds a bit confusing here. Otherwise, if there's no source of the height of the hotel then, just remove the part about the floors.
  • "Trump and Hyatt's partnership deteriorated during the early 1990s, and the Pritzker family, which operated the Grand Hyatt, acquired Trump's stake in the hotel in 1996." -> "With the deteriorating partnership between Trump and Hyatt, the Pritzker family, which operated the Grand Hyatt, acquired Trump's stake in the hotel in 1996."

Site

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  • "There is a subway entrance at the base of the hotel on Lexington Avenue, with a stair and an elevator." -> "A subway entrance with a stair and an elevator is at the base of the hotel on Lexington Avenue"

Architecture

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  • Warren & Wetmore.[12][1] -> Refs swap over
  • "When the Commodore opened, it contained 2,000 rooms and was either 26[3][16] or 28 stories high.[12][17] There were also five basement stories." -> Combine these two sentences (e.g. "28 stories high with five basement levels")
  • "Above the third story" -> Maybe suggest "third floor"? (try vary the word usage a little)
    • I've rephrased it. In some of my other articles, the third physical story may be numbered (for example) floor 2 or floor 4, hence this specific wording. However, this is not a problem in the article. Epicgenius (talk) 15:51, 10 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "gutted" - personally find it a weird usage here. Maybe "revamped" or "demolished"? Source states it's being reconstructed.
  • "as well as" - I note the recurring use of this; try to consider using simple alternatives or vary the sentence structure.
  • "as well as a fire alarm system, which at the time of the hotel's opening was an uncommon feature" - why?
    • I'm not sure exactly why, but at the time of the hotel's construction, buildings were not required to have fire-safety features that are now commonplace, such as sprinklers and fire extinguishers. Epicgenius (talk) 15:51, 10 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "The central hallway continued to the grill room... At the rear of the vestibule was a grill room" - is it the same grill room?
  • Also might consider substituting "contained" with just "has/had" because I note it gets very repetitive too.
  • "Additional passageways connected with other buildings" -> Just to clarify, such passageways no longer exist? Also would remove "with" or might rewrite "The building used to connect with others such as..."
  • "There was a large palm tree in the middle of the lobby, which reached nearly to the ceiling." -> "A large palm tree in the middle of the lobby reached nearly to the ceiling" Also try to reword sentences with "there" since they tend to clutter the word flow.
  • "there were also stairs leading down to the street-level grill room" -> "stairs led down..."
  • "also included" -> "included"
  • "as well as provide sufficient space" -> "while providing sufficient space"
  • "There was a roof garden above the ballroom" -> "Above the ballroom was a roof garden for tea and luncheons"
  • "with a yellow, blue, and tan carpet." -> Are there three different carpets of different colours? Otherwise "yellow, blue and tan carpet" or "a carpet in yellow, blue and tan".
  • "The vestibule's high ceiling had three chandeliers" -> "Three chandeliers from the vestibule's high ceiling, which was painted..."
  • "the marble floors were covered by a carpet" -> Switch to active voice. Is it specified what's the carpet's colour(s)?
  • "The western end of the vestibule contained" -> might I suggest "led to" instead of "contained"
  • "The hotel also contained a vehicular elevator from 42nd Street, which ascended to the viaduct level[27] and could carry up to 10,000 lb (4,500 kg)." -> Similarly "contained" to "included"
  • "contained its own "floor clerk"," comma is unnecessary
  • "Floor clerks acted as concierges for their respective stories. The floor clerk coordinated..." -> "Acting as the concierge for their respective stories, the floor clerk coordinated.."
  • "Each bedroom typically contained a bed, a dressing table, two small chairs, a large armchair, and a small table with a telephone. The bedrooms contained ornate light fixtures on the ceiling, as well as small writing tables with lamps"
    • Suggest "Each bedroom typically contained a bed, a dressing table, two small chairs, a large armchair, a small table with a telephone and other writing tables with lamps."
    • Depending on source, would say "Ornate light fixtures from the ceiling lit up the bedrooms". or "The bedrooms were retrofitted with ornate light fixtures from the ceiling".
  • Also no free-use photographs/diagrams available to illustrate the Commodore Hotel?
  • "If gambling in New York were legalized, the retail space was designed to be easily converted to a casino,[50] but this conversion never happened.[51]"
  • "When the lobby was renovated in 2013, it was clad in stone and dark wood, and a carpet with gray stripes was installed. The ceiling was retrofitted with uplights that changed color depending on the time of the day. In addition, there were black leather chairs, as well as registration and concierge desks made of white quartz."
    • Suggest: "After the renovation in 2013, the lobby was clad in stone and dark wood, laid in a carpet with gray stripes and furnished with black leather chairs. The ceiling was retrofitted with uplights that changed color depending on the time of the day. The registration and concierge desks were made of white quartz."
  • "of female heads, for the lobby;" -> remove comma
  • and tiled walls.[54][51] -> swap over
  • "includes a second-story restaurant, cantilevered over" -> remove comma
  • "In addition, the restaurant contains a lounge and a private dining area." -> "The restaurant includes a lounge and a private dining area".
  • "one of the only parts" -> "one of the few parts". Also "to be preserved" -> "preserved"
  • "was equipped with a telephone and was used for room service." -> drop the second "was"
  • "The ballroom retains its carved ceiling, which measures 27 ft (8.2 m) high." -> carved ceiling measuring...
  • "The loft suites contain walnut furniture and other "masculine" design features" -> might suggest replacing "contain" with "are furnished with"

More to come for the subsequent sections.--ZKang123 (talk) 10:00, 7 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

History

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More to come.--ZKang123 (talk) 05:52, 8 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

I don't see much issues for the reception part.--ZKang123 (talk) 05:56, 8 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Images

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All are free-use or in public domain. Though I felt there could be more photographs of the interior and some shops on the outside.

One of the captions: "The Hyatt Grand Central New York as seen from One Vanderbilt's observation deck" -> I might note the H-shape of the hotel mentioned earlier.--ZKang123 (talk) 05:59, 8 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Alright. Overall, I think it's good enough to pass, but perhaps if this is brought further to FA, I suggest the addition of more images of the former Commodore Hotel and the existing interior of the hotel.--ZKang123 (talk) 00:26, 11 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

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