Talk:Hussein of Jordan/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Seadowns in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 08:10, 6 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 08:10, 6 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Criteria

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GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

  • 1
    1.a  Y
    1.b  Y
  • 2
    2.a  Y
    2.b  Y
    2.c  Y
    2.d  Y (Several are in the 40% range, but they are PD.)
  • 3
    3.a  Y
    3.b  Y
  • 4
    4.a  Y
  • 5
    5.a  Y
  • 6
    6.a  Y
    6.b  Y
  • No DAB links  Y
  • No Dead links  Y

Prose Suggestions

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Lede

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  • The lede technically violates MOS:LEADLENGTH, as it is four paragraphs with only 10,000 words. If there is a way for you to combine these without losing content, please do so, otherwise, WP:IAR.
  • In 1952, when he was a 17-year old schoolboy, suggest changing this to In 1952, at the age of 17,.
  • and a large Palestinian refugee population resulting from the 1948 Arab–Israeli War. suggest and a large Palestinian refugee population as a result of the 1948 Arab–Israeli War.

Early life

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  • crown prince Talal and Zein Al-Sharaf. in the lede Zein Al-Sharaf is called princess in the lede, suggest doing the same here.
  • did not see in his two sons Talal and Nayef features of kingship, suggest did not see in his two sons Talal and Nayef potential for kingship,

Reign

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Accession
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  • the Parliament forced King Talal to abdicate owing to his mental state suggest the Parliament forced King Talal to abdicate due to his mental state
  • He was enthroned on 2 May 1953; his cousin Faisal II assumed his constitutional powers as king in Iraq on the same day. suggest He was enthroned on 2 May 1953, the same day that his cousin Faisal II assumed his constitutional powers as king in Iraq.
A liberal experiment
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  • but then Nabulsi presented a new list, which Hussein refused to act upon. suggest however Nabulsi then presented an expanded list, which Hussein refused to act upon.
Arab Federation between Iraq and Jordan
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  • a Nasser-supported regime suggest a Nasserist regime

Illness

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  • He stayed away from Jordan in the clinic until the end of 1998, suggest He stayed at the clinic until the end of 1998,

Personal life

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I happen to know that Hussein was very generous to Lady Glubb, the widow of Glubb Pasha. She lived in a large house in Mayfield, E. Sussex, and he spent a great deal of money on its maintenance. He would visit incognito, flying himself to a small airfield not far away, and then driving himself in a very ordinary car. This is all OR, no doubt. Seadowns (talk) 23:24, 11 August 2019 (UTC)Reply