Talk:Homer vs. Lisa and the 8th Commandment/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 04:41, 2 April 2010 (UTC)

Hi. I'll be reviewing this article as part of the April GAN Backlog Elimination Drive. This article is in great shape, but until the below minor issues are fixed, I'm placing it on hold. The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 04:41, 2 April 2010 (UTC)

Lead

• It'd be better if you include what number the episode is overall (i.e., "...and the 26th episode overall")
  • Done. Theleftorium 10:43, 2 April 2010 (UTC)

Plot

• Wikilink $ to US Dollar.
  •  Done Theleftorium 09:27, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
• "as long as he likes" → "as long as he desires"
  •  Done Theleftorium 09:27, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
• In the last paragraph: "a much-anticipated boxing match in which Drederick Tatum will challenge for the World Heavyweight Championship." Do you mean fight for the Championship?
  • Not sure what you mean. Theleftorium 09:27, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
    • As in, in stead of "Tatum with challenge for the Championship," say "Tatum will fight for the Championship." The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 15:37, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
• "[...]all of his friends to come over and watch[...]" -> "over to watch"
  • That would cause repetition of the word "to". Theleftorium 09:27, 3 April 2010 (UTC)

Production

• Is that Moses picture really necessary?
  •  Done Removed. Theleftorium 09:31, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
• In the DVD commentary for "The Homer They Fall," I seem to recall Weinstein saying that Tatum was named after a kid he knew in school. Am I correct?

Cultural references

• In stead of "looks exactly like Don King," I say it should be worded, "strongly resembles Don King"
• Burns is not mentioned in the plot, so wikilink to his name.
• The bit about the films they watch should be before the Broadcast News reference.
  •  Done (all of them) Theleftorium 09:31, 3 April 2010 (UTC)

Reception

• Nodda. Nice work.

Images

• Two PD images, on FU image which seems fine.

Final say

• Everything's fine. Passing. Nice job! The Flash ^{I am Jack's complete lack of surprise} 17:40, 3 April 2010 (UTC)
  • Thanks a lot for the review! :) Theleftorium 19:57, 3 April 2010 (UTC)