Talk:Harry's Bar (London)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Steelkamp (talk · contribs) 01:12, 18 September 2023 (UTC)

Good article criteria

Well written

• I think the lead should be expanded. A general rule of thumb is mention something from each section of the article in the lead. In particular, I think more from the origins section about the disagreement with James Sherwood, and the new branches that opened in 2017 and 2018 should be mentioned.
  •  Fixed I've added the new branches and added Sherwood. No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• Venice could be linked. I know its a pretty well known city, but I think the more links the better, and it won't cause sea of blue issues.
  •  Fixed No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• Lawrence Goldman, wrote of the club... That comma should be removed.
  •  Fixed No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• Birley had previously opened the members club Annabel's in 1963. Not sure what this sentence is there for. It doesn't really fit under "Ambience" or flow from the previous sentence.
  •  Fixed Removed. No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• The membership of Harry's Bar was described shortly... can be changed to The membership of Harry's Bar was described in the New York Times shortly...
  •  Fixed No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• Penati later left Harry's Bar after it was bought by Richard Caring, stating... Since the purchase by Richard Caring was not mentioned until later, this can be changed to Penati left Harry's Bar after it was bought by Richard Caring In 2007, stating...
  •  Fixed No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• Oxford Street and James Street, Marylebone can be linked.
  •  Fixed I've removed the imprecise Oxford Street, and clarified the location as Marylebone. No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:11, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• A branch of Harry's Bar opened on James Street near Oxford Street in October 2018. Another branch of Harry's Bar, Harry's Dolce Vita, opened on Basil Street in Knightsbridge in December 2017. These sentences are out of chronological order.
  •  Fixed I've swapped them around. No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• Quotes take up a large portion of this article, which does not make for the best writing. The length and number of direct quotes should be reduced.
  •  Fixed I've sought to reduce the quotes. No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• The origins section paragraph should be split up. It is massive right now.

Verifiable with no original research

• The club was established by Mark Birley in 1979 and named for the famed bar of the same name in Venice founded by Giuseppe Cipriani. The reference doesn't seem to back this up.
  • I don't believe this has been fixed yet. Steelkamp (talk) 13:44, 28 September 2023 (UTC)
• ...with the menu centred around the Milan region of Italy. The decor of the club was designed by Nina Campbell in a Venetian style with furnishings and tableware imported from Italy. Does the reference back this up?
  • This seems to be ok now. Steelkamp (talk) 13:44, 28 September 2023 (UTC)
• ...are prominently displayed among fabrics by Mariano Fortuny. Does the reference back this up?
  • I still don't see mention of Fortuny in the references for that sentence. Steelkamp (talk) 13:44, 28 September 2023 (UTC)
• The restaurant has polished floorboards... Does the reference back this up?
  •  FixedI've removed these, I think I have lost the original citation.No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:11, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• The head chef upon opening was Alberico Penati... Is there a source for this? Ref 9, written in 1998, says Penati had been chef for a decade beforehand. Does this mean he was not head chef when the club opened?

Neutral

• The origins section might be a bit biased against Sherwood. It features a large quote by Birley and Robin Birley but nothing really from Sherwood's point of view. The Vanity Fair reference says "Sherwood wrote that as the head of a public company he doesn’t have the same freedom that Birley enjoys."
  •  Fixed I've added that quote. No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

Illustrated, if possible

• The striped awnings of Harry's Bar. As the article does not discuss the striped awnings, I think this caption should be replaced by something more generic such as Harry's Bar from another angle.
  •  Fixed No Swan So Fine (talk) 13:12, 25 September 2023 (UTC)
• Optional: I recommend alt text for all images.

General

That's it. Putting on hold now. Steelkamp (talk) 04:01, 18 September 2023 (UTC)

@No Swan So Fine: How is this coming along? Steelkamp (talk) 06:19, 25 September 2023 (UTC)

With comments left unaddressed after a month, I am going to fail this review. There wasn't that much that needed fixing up, so feel free to ping me if you renominate. Steelkamp (talk) 23:22, 26 October 2023 (UTC)