Talk:Harrison West Neighborhood
The contents of the Harrison West Neighborhood page were merged into Harrison West and it now redirects there. For the contribution history and old versions of the merged article please see its history. |
Peer Comments
editHistory
editThe Harrison West Society
edit1st paragraph: "for quotations within quotations, use double quote marks outermost and, working inward, alternate single with double quote marks." -- Wikipedia Manual of Style
bullet points: "protect our residential areas and bolster our commercial strip." Incorrect writing perspective - use "their" instead of "our"
This section seems to promote the Harrison West Society from a biased perspective. Would benefit from a more objective point of view
Geography
editCitation required
Structures and Landmarks
edit"boasts two cafes with wi-fi connections, so you can enjoy our neighborhood over your favorite drink and sandwich."
Use of opinionated language, use of "you" and "your"
Entertainment
edit"excellent place for any type of recreation"
Use of opinionated language
Education
edit"even that of Ohio"
use of "even" is unnecessary, implies bias
Gallery
editIntegrate images into article
References
editSources must be reformatted to appear here. Use inline citations.
Additional Comments
editArticle is well organized. It could benefit from fewer direct quotations - these make the article seem biased towards the opinion of the source material. The Article could integrate more images within the text. The lead paragraph is concise and well-written.
Instructor Comments
editWell-written
edit- Refer to the manual of style guidelines which emphasis on writing style
Verifiable with no original research
edit- References need to be formatted properly.
- You over use quotations. They should only be used in specific instances.
- GoodVibes is not a reputable reference. Please Use US Census Data.
Broad in its coverage
edit- Wanting more detail on Parks,
- Info on outside attractions is good.
- Need more info on neighborhood attractions (I know that there are several bar/restaurants in the area that are notable).
- Article does a good job of staying focused, but it very narrow in approach.
Neutral
edit- You need to edit out the commentary. This is VERY important.
Stable
edit- If you follow the above four items, you article will be.
Illustrated
edit- Move images from gallery into main space of the article.
- Provide captions for those.
- Good use of place infobox, but insert a image that is representative of the neighborhood and take photos yourself.
Kenitzer.1 (talk) 14:36, 4 December 2014 (UTC)
2nd draft
editNotes from class editor: You don't need to say how far away everything is in terms of walking vs. driving. You should link to the pages of the Arena District and Short North when talking about those places. We also don't need to know what percentage of Columbus's total population lives in Harrison West. Kowalski.118 (talk) 13:10, 9 December 2014 (UTC)