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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:47, 5 April 2015 (UTC)
I reviewed this back in August. I should complete this by tomorrow ☠ Jaguar ☠ 21:47, 5 April 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments
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edit- "The game has been supported post-launch with bug fixes, updates, and downloadable content (DLC)" - is this really worth mentioning? Surely every game now has patches and updates given to them
- Removed this sentence. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:42, 6 April 2015 (UTC)
- "A sequel, Halo 5: Guardians, is set to be released for the Xbox One in 2015" - it's due to come out on the 27th October this year, so that might be worth mentioning
- Added this along with a reference. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:42, 6 April 2015 (UTC)
- The lead summarises the article well (improving since last time), so this meets the GA criteria
Body
edit- "Four years after the events of Halo 3, Forward Unto Dawn" - should be UNSC Forward Unto Dawn in its first mention only, since it's a ship (yeah I'm a Halo nerd). I think the same can apply to the Infinity
- Added UNSC before the name of both ships on first mention. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:42, 6 April 2015 (UTC)
- The first paragraph in the Development section sounds wrong. Bungie became independent in 2007 but still managed to produce two games between 2008-2010 (ODST and Reach), but this paragraph makes it sound like they stopped making Halo straight after they split with Microsoft
- I've reworded this. Hopefully it is better now. Do say if it needs to be clearer. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:42, 6 April 2015 (UTC)
- Be careful, the third (larger) paragraph in the Development is lacking citations. It has a pile of citations at the very end of the paragraph instead of having them evenly spread
- Fixed this. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:42, 6 April 2015 (UTC)
- "Reception towards Spartan Ops was less favourable than multiplayer and campaign" - favorable, assuming this has to stay consistant with AmEng
- Fixed this. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:42, 6 April 2015 (UTC)
References
edit- Impressive. The toolserver picks up no dead links given an article this extensive
- I noticed a couple of YouTube references in this article. Per WP:VG/RS, YouTube is only acceptable as a reference if it cites the relevant information and is from its official channel only, in this case it would be 343 Industries. I would safely lose these (if you plan on FACing) but it's your call if you want to keep these in. I think another reviewer would urge to remove them, but from where I see it they're official and should be okay
- I'll look into sorting this out tomorrow. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:42, 6 April 2015 (UTC)
- Replaced all YouTube references. The1337gamer (talk) 10:48, 6 April 2015 (UTC)
- I'll look into sorting this out tomorrow. --The1337gamer (talk) 00:42, 6 April 2015 (UTC)
On hold
editIt looks like this has improved since I reviewed in last in August, so well done on that. If those issues above can be clarified then it looks like this shouldn't have a problem with passing the GAN. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days, good luck ☠ Jaguar ☠ 22:03, 5 April 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you for addressing them all, I'm confident this meets the GA criteria now. Looks like we're good to go ☠ Jaguar ☠ 08:39, 7 April 2015 (UTC)