Talk:Habitat/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 04:28, 27 June 2016 (UTC)

Comments by Dunkleosteus77

just scanning through for now   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  04:28, 27 June 2016 (UTC)

• double-check ref no. 42. I'm pretty sure there's more to it.
• duplinks: ecology (in the lead), carbon cycling, and hydrogen sulfide
• there's some text sandwiching in the Microbiomes section
• wikilink "pioneer species" in the image about Mt. St. Helens

Thank you for taking on this review. With regard to the "Monotypic habitat" section, it was there when I started expanding this article from practically nothing, and I have hardly touched it. I will see what I can do with regard to ref42. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:06, 27 June 2016 (UTC)

I have added a little more information, but I only have access to the abstract. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 12:16, 29 June 2016 (UTC)

• Now there's text sandwiching in the Extreme habitat section. Just delete the intertidal, wetland, and desert picture, and maybe add add a microhabitat image
• ref no. 42 needs a journal name, volume, page numbers, and ISSN. Also, remove the url since only the abstract is available. doi: 10.1007/s10750-007-9177-z
• In the lead, reword " Or the change may be more gradual over millennia with alterations in the climate, as ice sheets and glaciers advance and retreat, as different weather patterns bring changes of precipitation and solar radiation"; never start a sentence with a conjunction, also you're missing an "and" after the comma
• change "...its requirements; it is found" to "...its requirements: it is found..." or, further down the sentence, add an "and" after the comma "...lifecycle requirements, it inhabits..."
• change "Lightning strike and toppled trees..." to "Lightning strikes and toppled trees..." or "A lightning strike and a toppled tree..."
• wikilink pioneer species and invasive species in the Environmental factors section (optional)
• change "degree of oxygenation" to "oxygen saturation" or "oxygen levels"
• change "...vertebrates and invertebrates" to "animals" or "organisms" or "creatures" (optional)
• wikilink all the habitat names like bayous, backwater, mudflats, lagoons, shrub layer, etc.
• wikilink desiccation (optional)
• In the Microhabitats section, the last sentence of the first paragraph does not have a ref
• "biodiverse species" I don't think a species can be biodiverse, and I'm not sure that that's even a word
• reword "that different types of rotting wood alone..."
• change "The life cycles of some parasites involves..." to "The life cycles of some parasites involve..." or "The life cycle of some parasites involves..."
• Microphallus turgidus is found in New Zealand, not the U.S.

Microphallus turgidus may have originally been a New Zealand species but this example comes from the US. I have dealt with the above points apart from the images which look fine on my screen and which I think add to the encyclopedic value of the article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:45, 30 June 2016 (UTC)

• The Manual of Style says to avoid text sandwiching, so I think this is an issue at criterion 1b

I don't see the text sandwiching on my screen. I have removed one image. Is that better? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:03, 30 June 2016 (UTC)

• reword "...bulk of the ocean is much less hospitable to air-breathing humans" it's underwater, and air-breathing things find this impossible to live in
• wikilink "bioluminescent"
• wikilink "fragmentation" to Habitat fragmentation
• Use this converter to convert ISBN-10 to ISBN-13, as per WP:ISBN
• explain what a monotypic habitat is in the opening sentence (I read the section and I'm still not sure what a monotypic habitat is)

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:03, 30 June 2016 (UTC)

Pass   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:10, 30 June 2016 (UTC)