Talk:HMS Marlborough (1912)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 14:40, 22 March 2015 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:40, 22 March 2015 (UTC)

• No DABs, external links OK.
• Images appropriately licensed.
• Move boilers to the power line in the infobox, not sure that I'd bother with the 3-pdr saluting guns, and probably too much info on the torpedo tubes. Better, I think, just to give size and number in interest of shortening the infobox. Should probably add links to shp, kn, and nmi in infobox as well.
  • Done
• 47 mm isn't 2 inches.
  • Fixed template
• Period-correct name for HMNB Devonport is Devonport Royal Dockyard.
  • Good catch
• Link launch, laid down, secondary battery, main battery, range clock.
  • All done except secondary battery, which redirects to rechargeable battery (unless you have a better link in mind)
    • Try [[Battleship secondary armament|secondary armament]] and range clock links to the wrong thing. Range dial is what Burt's referring to and would be so much more descriptive than the clockwork range computer that the Brits actually called a range clock.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:07, 27 March 2015 (UTC)
• What does second command flagship mean? And long-base?
  • • Don't forget these.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:07, 27 March 2015 (UTC)
      • Whoops - reworded the first and added a note on the range-finders - see if that works for you.
• Which turret is A turret?
  • Added a note
• What do you mean by neutralised the ship, referring to Wiesbaden?
  • Campbell says that the salvos from Marlborough "seem to have finally wrecked the Wiesbaden" - I assume by that he meant that the ship was no longer actively taking part in the battle, since she had already been immobilized.
    • I figured much as you did, but I'm mildly concerned about general readers understanding the same thing. But I think that maybe I'm over-thinking things.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:07, 27 March 2015 (UTC)
• Is there any information about when the other three torpedoes were fired?
  • Not that Campbell says.
• Move the descriptor of "battleship" when referring to KGV to first use.
  • Done
• Which time zone is used in the Jutland section?
  • Added the standard note. Parsecboy (talk) 20:43, 27 March 2015 (UTC)
    • Still need to deal with range clock and secondary battery.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:53, 31 March 2015 (UTC)
      • Both fixed now. Parsecboy (talk) 23:30, 31 March 2015 (UTC)