Talk:HMS Empress (1914)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Starstriker7 (talk · contribs) 15:28, 1 December 2011 (UTC)

I will do this review. --Starstriker7^(Talk) 15:28, 1 December 2011 (UTC)

Criterion 1

• "During that month the ship transported equipment" - Comma between month and ship.
• World War I is mentioned in the lead, but is not mentioned in the article proper. It can probably be added in the first paragraph, granted that the Admiralty requisitioned the ship for the sake of using it in World War I and its operations.
• "primary duty was watch and attack Turkish positions" - add a "to" between was and watch.
• You can mention that the name of the Dutch trawler was Marta van Hattem (I think; the words appeared as white on my browser, so I had to copy and paste and, for whatever reason, it messed up the spacing of the name).

Criterion 2

Nothing that I can note.

Criterion 3

The first thing I noticed was that the header of the first section read "Description" instead of "Design and description", but I don't think it makes a particularly large difference here.

Criterion 4

The article is neutral in tone and does not give undue weight to any side.

Criterion 5

The article's edit history indicates stability.

Criterion 6

The image checks out, and the caption is relevant. No issues here.

All done. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:51, 3 December 2011 (UTC)

Now that I look back, I think that it would be good if you can add the name of the British submarine as well. I won't hold this article from passing, though. You're welcome, and good work. --Starstriker7^(Talk) 17:12, 4 December 2011 (UTC)