Talk:HMS Barham (04)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:14, 7 January 2016 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this one. JAGUAR  17:14, 7 January 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• "Other than that battle, and the inconclusive Action of 19 August" - why is this not written fully as Action of 19 August 1916?
• "Barham was played a minor role in quelling" - removed 'was'
• "At 18:17 he realized that" - realised, if you want to stay consistent with British spelling
• "before she stabilized without any damage." - stabilised too
• "Lützow was little bothered by these hits" - I don't understand this. Not sure if it sounds too informal here - does this mean she suffered little damage?
• "Von Tiesenhausen was not certain of the results of his attack and radioed that he'd hit a Queen Elizabeth-class battleship with one torpedo" - he had
• No dead links

This is a great article. Well written, comprehensive and very deserving of GA status. Once all of the above are clarified this should be good to go. JAGUAR  17:26, 7 January 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for catching these; this is exactly the kind of stuff I was looking for my reviewer to find.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:04, 7 January 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them! I'll promote this. I might review a few more soon. JAGUAR  13:07, 8 January 2016 (UTC)