Talk:HMS Achilles (1863)/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Tomobe03 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 20:46, 23 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll review this article shortly.--Tomobe03 (talk) 20:46, 23 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

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MOS and prose:

  • Units of measurement should be separated from the preceding figures by a non-breaking space per WP:NBSP. I noticed this at just one instance: 6,121 bm
  • I'm not so sure this goes against any MOS policy, but you use 7-inch guns and seven-inch guns (and similarly so for 9-inch ones) to describe guns. Perhaps it would be good to use the spelled out form or figure consistently. This is no dealbreaker here, though.
  • It seems to me that the first paragraph of the "Service" section would be better off as a part of the now very short first paragraph of the "Design and description" section - especially because it speaks nothing on the service of the ship, but on its construction - a topic somehow preceding armament and armour issues.
  • I've renamed the section Construction and service as they seem inextricably linked to me.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:10, 27 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

I also made a few copyedits, and you might want to review those as well. Nice article.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:43, 27 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

A minor point, but cannon is one of those weird words that is both singular and plural. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:10, 27 May 2013 (UTC)Reply
Ha! I did not know that - I stand corrected and a bit wiser for it!--Tomobe03 (talk) 18:37, 27 May 2013 (UTC)Reply
All clear now. Passing GAN!--Tomobe03 (talk) 18:55, 27 May 2013 (UTC)Reply