Talk:Graveyard Mountain Home/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 00:58, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

• dead links to fix

• Unfortunately, the Transcending the Mundane interview and review have been offline since early September and look unlikely to come back online. I can't find any archived versions of the pages at archive.org, so I'll have to go through and delete everything which relies on those sources. Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

• File:CK GraveydMntnHome.jpg needs a source  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Lead

• First paragraph should be merged into another  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
• You need to cover all sections in the lead, including composition  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
• Make clear that Ghost Book is the name of the soundtrack, not the film  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Background

• Theron Patterson does not need linking  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
• "InsideOut Records offered to sign Moore to their label." → rewrite  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Composition

• This section doesn't really cover the composition of the album, it is more of an extension to the background section. Focus on musical genres and styles and lyrics

• Moved the paragraph on personnel to the Background section; the rest of the information should fit in Composition. Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

• "plan to record an "organic, and less digital"[1] album," - place ref after comma

• In a previous GAR, I was told that cites must go directly after quotes finished. Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

• Link chord progression

Paragraph removed - source offline. Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

• Remove red links as they are not notable people  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
• ""an extreme"[4] of his work," - ref after comma

• See above. Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Release and promotion

• Good work here

Reception

• Unlink Millenia Nova  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
• 'Anderson described the music as "at times is funky in a glitchy, herky-jerky sort of way..."' - this incorporated quote is grammatically incorrect  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)
• "there were some "traditional"[8] songs on the album," = ref after comma

• See response in Composition section. Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Track listing

• Source for writers?

• Isn't it common sense where the sources for writers, personnel, and the track listing itself are from? I've done a few album GAs now and this hasn't been an issue, but I can add the if you like.

• It is up to you, however I have always thought that it makes sense to source things like this, and it avoids disputes later on. There is the template {{cite music release notes}} designed for this purpose. Adabow (talk · contribs) 01:03, 22 November 2010 (UTC)

• Not sure if that's how you want it formatted, but I've added the sources in for this and the personnel section. Una Laguna^Talk 17:12, 30 November 2010 (UTC)

• You can incorporate the additional writers of songs into the extra_column field in {{track listing}}

• There are so few additional writers that I figured an extra column, which would mostly be empty, would be unnecessary. Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Personnel

• Source?

• See track listing section. Una Laguna^Talk 17:12, 30 November 2010 (UTC)

References

• Make sure that only works in print are italicised, (ie websites should not be)

•  Done Una Laguna^Talk 17:12, 30 November 2010 (UTC)

External links

• Official site - official site of what?  Done Una Laguna^Talk 15:14, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

I'll place the review on hold until improvements are made. Adabow (talk · contribs) 01:28, 21 November 2010 (UTC)

Nice work - passed now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 19:55, 30 November 2010 (UTC)

Many thanks for your thorough review! :) Una Laguna^Talk 23:06, 30 November 2010 (UTC)