Talk:Good Girl Gone Bad: Reloaded/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by AJona1992 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 00:01, 9 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

I will review this article since I didn't get to comment on Tomica's last FAC  . So I'm making it up :D. Best, jonatalk to me 00:01, 9 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • Too many sentences has the word "song" and is seen as repetitive at times (ex: He felt that "Disturbia" would be better suited for a female singer and gave the song to Rihanna. Kennedy produced the song, while Makeba Riddick produced Rihanna's vocals. The song was recorded by Andrew Vastola at Rocky Mountain Recorders in Denver, Colorado.)
  • Overlinking found (Maroon 5, lead single, MTV News, Best Dance Recording, 2009 Grammy Awards)
  • Missing a word "was released as second single from the album on April 28, 2008"
  • Missing a word "suggested that she wanted to release "Disturbia" as next single"
  • Missing a word "She performed "Take a Bow" for first time on the"
  • Missing a word "Rihanna performed "Disturbia" for first time"
  • Missing a word "it was predicted that would sell"
  • Missing a word and needs rewording "In its second week reached number nine and it the third week"
Done all. — Tomíca(T2ME) 22:21, 10 May 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "As of November 2012, both Good Girl Gone Bad and Reloaded have sold 2,800,000 copies in the US alone." - any way of updating this figure?
Nope. That was the last update of the sales. — Tomíca(T2ME) 22:21, 10 May 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • "Good Girl Gone Bad re-entered the UK Singles Chart" - is this an error?

I will continue the review tomorrow with a source check and any referencing issues. Best, jonatalk to me 02:28, 10 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

References
  • Why is YouTube sourced to the claim "and presents Rihanna as a female protagonist who leaves her boyfriend because of his infidelity."? (FN#44)
    Because you can use the official video from YouTube to write short synopsis or resume about the video. Same as down — Tomíca(T2ME) 21:01, 14 May 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Why is YouTube sourced to the claim "and portrays Rihanna in various locations such as in a prison cell and gas chamber."? (FN#59)
  • You already linked Time Inc. for FN#29, no need to link it (FN#63)
  • Done. 21:01, 14 May 2013 (UTC)
  • FN#70 is inconsistent to FN#36 and FN#38 (linking)
  • Inconsistency with dates (compare FN#77 and FN#78 with FN#79)

These are my reference notes, nothing major. Best, jonatalk to me 15:14, 14 May 2013 (UTC)Reply