Talk:Gelatin microparticle
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Peer Review - Erdelyi
editOverview:
editThe introduction does a good job introducing the reader to the subject, and smoothly transitions to explaining the uses and significance of the subject. Other than a broken reference in the Applications section, both sections are readable, properly cited, and structured so that they increase in complexity as one reads.
Suggestions:
editPlenty of opportunities to link to other pages, although using all of these might be excessive:
Polymer
Microparticles
Hydrolysis
Bioactive (Biological Activity)
Emulsification
TGF-β1-3
in vitro
Radioactively labeled (Deuterium labeling?)
The first sentence of Production "...are multiple production protocol.." not sure if this should be "protocols" for number agreement. Also, "Water in water emulsification is a method developed..." Might be better as "The water in water emulsification method was developed..."
In Applications "interest and attention" might be redundant where one word would suffice. Otherwise the article looks good.
Elpardack (talk) 21:32, 5 April 2015 (UTC)
Review for draft 4/7
editThis article provides a good introduction to the various uses of gelatin microparticles. I think the language presented in this page is largely suitable for audiences of all types, and the content gives a good idea of the wide spectrum of uses.
I think there's still a lot of expansion that should be done on each of the sections in this paper. The productions section might be improved by a very brief description of each protocol, or at least a link to a relevant article for each. Water in water emulsification seems like a really interesting protocol but all we got is that one short sentence. I was definitely left wanting more on this part!
Overall I think the content is good. A few grammatical or typographical errors catch the eye, primarily the repeated capitalization of microparticles. I'm not sure if this was done intentionally or by accident. Also, the code for your third reference doesn't seem to have worked quite right!