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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:27, 24 November 2021 (UTC)Reply


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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

You do have a good amount of GANs up; here's another review from me! --K. Peake 08:27, 24 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Thank you very much! Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:59, 24 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • What exactly makes the img relevant here?
    • Contemporary image of just such a scene in Bellman's Stockholm.
  • Remove comma after the brackets
    • Done.
  • Like last time, the best-known and best-loved songs info should not be in the opening sentence; instead, mention that it is Epistle No. 40 them from his 1790 collection
    • Done.
  • Add a sentence mentioning the pattern of the verses here
    • Done.
  • "with soldiers mixed up" → "where soldiers mixed up"
    • Done.
  • The subtitle is not sourced anywhere in the body
    • Added.
  • Remove musicologist introduction to James Massengale since this being in the body is sufficient
    • Done.
  • Maybe add what writers actually praised about the song and if any of the covers are notable enough, mention them here
    • Added.

Context

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  • Pipe King Gustav III to Gustav III on the img text
    • Done.
  • [1] should be solely at the end of the sentence
    • Moved.
  • "from drinking songs to" → "such as drinking songs and"
    • Done.
  • "during the eighteenth century." → "during the 18th century." per MOS:NUM
    • Done.

Song

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Music and verse form

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  • Like last time, add text for the audio sample to comply with WP:NFCCP
    • Done.
  • "each of 14 lines." → "each consisting of 14 lines."
    • Done.
  • Pipe rhyming pattern to Rhyme scheme
    • Done.
  • Img looks good!
    • Thanks!

Lyrics

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  • "the soldiers; the chimney" → "the soldiers. Meanwhile, the chimney" to avoid an overly long sentence, as the voiced parts can be separate from the rest anyway
    • Split.
  • Start box looks good!
    • Noted.

Reception

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  • Pipe musicologist to Musicology
    • Done.
  • "and divisions of the music" → "and divisions of it"
    • Edited.
  • "he interjects short" → "Bellman interjects short"
    • Done.
  • "at the start and" → "at the start," since this is not the end
    • Done.
  • Is the comma supposed to be inside speech marks for "Skyldra"?
    • Yes.
  • The word "very" is not needed before beginning
    • Gone.
  • Pipe syntactic to Syntax
    • Done.
  • Pipe Wedding at Cana to Marriage at Cana on the img text
    • Done.
  • "furioso"[11] in which it's" → "furioso",[11] in which it is"
    • Done.
  • Start a new sentence at "What Fredman himself"
    • Done.
  • "The critic Bo Nordstrand notes" → "Critic Bo Nordstrand notes"
    • No, that's way too American.
  • Pipe Wedding at Cana to Marriage at Cana
    • Done.
  • Start a new sentence at "Like his contemporaries,"
    • Done.
  • "and that quote the Bible" → "and draw quotes from the Bible"
    • Edited.
  • Pipe book of Psalms to Psalms
    • Done.
  • "society chapter rituals and" → "society chapter rituals, and"
    • Done.
  • "The Bellman Society describes it as" → "The Bellman Society wrote of the composition," with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
    • Done.

Performances and adaptions

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  • The covers need more information than just appearing on albums to remain per WP:SONGCOVER
    • Removed for now.
  • If the covers end up lacking notability, then merge the translation with the above section and retitle to Reception and legacy
    • Done.

References

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  • Copyvio score looks very good at 26.5%!!!
    • Thank goodness.
  • Refs 2 and 8 are duplicates; is this a mistake or are they supposed to be citing separate pages?
    • Merged.
  • The Bellman Society → Bellman Society on ref 3 with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
    • Done.
  • Add language parameter for refs 10, 12 and 15
    • Done.
  • The Bellman Society → Bellman Society on ref 13 and add the language parameter
    • Done.

Sources

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  • Good
    • Noted.
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  • After the titles of links, add at followed by the website
    • Done.
  • Remove the first YouTube link since it is a copyright violation
    • Gone.

Final comments and verdict

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